Talk:Cydney Hill
Hannah Cooper: I really liked your post! I thought it said a lot of great information about your relationship with Twitter, and how it has changed over time. when you said that you did not think you had to have your family follow you online, why not? You say that it is the best way to get personal information about your life, so how come not have your family on there too? Is it not something that is meant for that audience? If so, who is your audience on your twitter? I thought it was good how you brought up privacy, as well, but I think you could have gone more in depth. Is there any example you have? Do you ever think you post too much online? I think you have a lot of great ideas and a nice foundation for the assignment, but I think you can expand on most of the ideas in order to tell more of a story and bring it back to your thesis. I think in your introduction, you should have a more enticing hook to get your reader to want to read more. I like that it tells a story, but maybe be more descriptive. I also think the headers for each of your sections could be more in depth and show more of your voice instead of just stating what is underneath. It would get the reader to want to read more when just skimming over the content. I think the writing style is great and shows both your voice and your point of view in a direct but creative way. I think, over all, great job and there is a lot here to work with!!
Hi Cydney, I really liked your story and how you connected it to your Twitter use. I have taken a similar journey through Twitter over the years, I too used to tweet way too much back in high school. The part about Twitter never sleeping is extremely accurate. That is one of the main reasons it is so appealing. I do think you could pare down the examples a little in the “A Phase: High School Twitter” section. I also think the “College Twitter — Twitter Now” section is interesting but not fully fleshed out. Maybe you could pull from the first section to fill it out? The same goes for the privacy section, it’s a good start but could also be expanded on. Overall, I really enjoyed reading your wiki. - Tom Pickren
Corina
Great job, Cydney!
When revising, consider your colleagues’ comments above: they are spot on.
Please consider them fully for your revision.
If you have any questions, or need help, please let me know.
Best,
Corina
