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| − | + | You have stunned me yet again with your holistic description of your Facebook avatar. Both your mechanics of writing and your creative aspects in evaluating your Facebook avatar are refreshing and enlightening at the same time. Your introductory paragraph is nearly perfect, where you introduce to readers the concept of your name, Cecilia Perhaps. You explain why you use the last name Perhaps and also begin to frame the rest of the avatar in the context of "Perhaps this...perhaps that". I think this really added to the creativity of your unique identity on Facebook. It could be authentic or it couldn't be. | |
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| + | What caught my eye again was the use of GIF's throughout the page that looped through the screenshots you included. Very ingenious idea! I'm stealing your code for that! | ||
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| + | I also liked how you explained YOUR personal story, about why you became the crazy person you are on Facebook. You felt societal pressures to look "good", to look "popular" to the rest of your friends. Thus, you needed to make yourself stand out to the rest of your Facebook friends, and thus the Cecilia Perhaps avatar was born. | ||
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| + | Unlike most students who sort of stick to their original identity on Facebook, you have chosen to create your very own. Your pictures show outrageous, hilarious, and downright crazy content. | ||
| + | But you can do so because you have emphasized and laid out the foundations of your Facebook clearly: your Facebook profile is not directly linked to you but rather as a figment of your imagination and moldable to your interests. | ||
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| + | Throughout the "Statuses" section, you describe this intrinsic grapple and pressure to produce content that pleases your audience. I think this is another unique part of you identity without a doubt. | ||
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| + | Overall, you went to great lengths to describe your Facebook identity. Your assignment showed depth and breadth at the same time. You did an outstanding job assessing your Facebook identity compared to you actual, physical identity. Clearly, you have created a divide between these two. Your writing is witty, satirical, and really contributed to the carefree nature of your Facebook avatar. | ||
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| + | You could maybe improve this assignment by relating back to Smith and Watson by drawing on one of their principles. The use of scholarly support could further bolster your arguments in your conclusion and could really help make it into a very compelling piece. Great job! | ||
Revision as of 12:54, 29 March 2016
Hey Cecilia, You have stunned me yet again with your holistic description of your Facebook avatar. Both your mechanics of writing and your creative aspects in evaluating your Facebook avatar are refreshing and enlightening at the same time. Your introductory paragraph is nearly perfect, where you introduce to readers the concept of your name, Cecilia Perhaps. You explain why you use the last name Perhaps and also begin to frame the rest of the avatar in the context of "Perhaps this...perhaps that". I think this really added to the creativity of your unique identity on Facebook. It could be authentic or it couldn't be.
What caught my eye again was the use of GIF's throughout the page that looped through the screenshots you included. Very ingenious idea! I'm stealing your code for that!
I also liked how you explained YOUR personal story, about why you became the crazy person you are on Facebook. You felt societal pressures to look "good", to look "popular" to the rest of your friends. Thus, you needed to make yourself stand out to the rest of your Facebook friends, and thus the Cecilia Perhaps avatar was born.
Unlike most students who sort of stick to their original identity on Facebook, you have chosen to create your very own. Your pictures show outrageous, hilarious, and downright crazy content. But you can do so because you have emphasized and laid out the foundations of your Facebook clearly: your Facebook profile is not directly linked to you but rather as a figment of your imagination and moldable to your interests.
Throughout the "Statuses" section, you describe this intrinsic grapple and pressure to produce content that pleases your audience. I think this is another unique part of you identity without a doubt.
Overall, you went to great lengths to describe your Facebook identity. Your assignment showed depth and breadth at the same time. You did an outstanding job assessing your Facebook identity compared to you actual, physical identity. Clearly, you have created a divide between these two. Your writing is witty, satirical, and really contributed to the carefree nature of your Facebook avatar.
You could maybe improve this assignment by relating back to Smith and Watson by drawing on one of their principles. The use of scholarly support could further bolster your arguments in your conclusion and could really help make it into a very compelling piece. Great job!
