Talk:Casey Sunden

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I love how you compared your Facebook to a scrapbook. The concept helped put some of who you are into the writing and gave the reader some insight into your offline identity. It was also very relatable in that I definitely use my profile in a similar way. Your writing is also very honest in that you selected the elements you believed to most represent you online. However, I believe you could have done some more self reflection on why you do certain things online or how they display your identity. For example, more connections on how your Facebook has been like a scrapbook to you. The connection to different elements on your profile to your identity would make the connection of ethical acculturation a lot clearer and would help you show more of your identity. You provided great elements the connection could just have been a little stronger.

Although your casual writing style is a good representation of how you choose to represent yourself on Facebook, I believe you could have done a little more to carry the idea of Facebook as a scrapbook. Like I said before, the metaphor would have helped the piece flow better and helped you reveal more about your identity. Also, there are a few grammatical errors that could have easily been corrected with a quick read over once or twice. Overall, your idea of a scrapbook was innovative and was a great way to look at your Facebook identity!
-Lauren Binder