Talk:Carol Castro-Adolphus

Hi Carol,

I like your introduction and how you talk about the different possible names that could reveal information about you when searched. This was an interesting first paragraph and made me interested int he rest of the autobiography. Talking about your feelings about the accuracy of information on the data broker report makes the piece more genuine as it allows the reader to see your view and opinion on the amount of information available. Your reflection on past actions, such as uploading your resume with personal information to that website also add a lot to the piece as you think about what you could have done to not have as much information out there. Overall, this is well structured and flows logically. There are no grammar mistakes which allow it to be quite an easy read. I think one area you could improve would be to possibly bring in a reading to back up your ideas that the amount of information available is scary. This will add more evidence and make the writing even stronger.

- Dylan Schwartz