Difference between revisions of "Talk:COVID-19 Contact-Tracing Apps"
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| − | + | By my count, you had 3021 words which means you met the required word count. I think something that helped you do so was the fact that you broke every main section of your page down into multiple subsections so you had plenty of content. Great job! | |
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| − | By my count, you had 3021 words which means you met the required word count. I think something that helped you do so was the fact that you broke every main section of your page down into multiple subsections so you had plenty of content. Great job! | + | |
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| + | Your article does include the three major components of a good article: an opening paragraph, a body in one or more sections, statements backed up by reliable sources. In your first paragraph, you do a good job laying a foundation by explaining the purpose of COVID-19 contact tracing applications. Furthermore, your brief introductory explanation about how the global accessibility of smartphones was an affordance that allows COVID-19 contact tracing apps to collect users’ data leads well into your introduction of the ethical concerns associated with such applications. You also effectively set up readers for the rest of the article by introducing these ethical concerns in the first paragraph. Introducing these ethical concerns at the beginning of the article means that the reader will have these in the back of their minds while reading the rest of the paper and may be able to identify ethical problems in the examples and case studies you write about in the body of the article. | ||
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| + | My only recommendation structure-wise would be to consider rearranging how you have divided the paper. With many short sections in a row, the first draft is a little choppy. It might be beneficial to consolidate some of the shorter sections into one bigger section. | ||
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'''Objective reporting (Neutral point of view)''': | '''Objective reporting (Neutral point of view)''': | ||
Revision as of 18:04, 3 February 2022
Length:
By my count, you had 3021 words which means you met the required word count. I think something that helped you do so was the fact that you broke every main section of your page down into multiple subsections so you had plenty of content. Great job!
Structure:
Your article does include the three major components of a good article: an opening paragraph, a body in one or more sections, statements backed up by reliable sources. In your first paragraph, you do a good job laying a foundation by explaining the purpose of COVID-19 contact tracing applications. Furthermore, your brief introductory explanation about how the global accessibility of smartphones was an affordance that allows COVID-19 contact tracing apps to collect users’ data leads well into your introduction of the ethical concerns associated with such applications. You also effectively set up readers for the rest of the article by introducing these ethical concerns in the first paragraph. Introducing these ethical concerns at the beginning of the article means that the reader will have these in the back of their minds while reading the rest of the paper and may be able to identify ethical problems in the examples and case studies you write about in the body of the article.
My only recommendation structure-wise would be to consider rearranging how you have divided the paper. With many short sections in a row, the first draft is a little choppy. It might be beneficial to consolidate some of the shorter sections into one bigger section.
Clarity:
Objective reporting (Neutral point of view):
