Talk:Bridget Doherty

Comment from Hailey Harris

Hi Bridget! I found your article to be very well-written and interesting. I appreciated how you took time to walk the reader through your process of searching yourself and analyzing your data broker information. I thought your argument of how it is easier to connect names rather than lineages was on point. However, I was left with a couple of questions that I think you could answer in a reflection section. For example, a lot of the information that populated my personal Instant Checkmate report came from my LinkedIn. Do you have a LinkedIn? Do you have a Facebook? And if you do have these accounts, state that and reflect on why they wouldn’t appear in your Instant Checkmate. If you aren’t comfortable going into specific detail, I think your article would benefit from at least a little bit of explanation as to why you think nothing appeared in your search results. Good job!

Kavya Pratapa's Comments

Hi Bridget! I think you did a great job of bringing your voice into your article. I also really enjoyed the conversational tone you took as it made the article easy to understand and fun to read. Something that I felt you could improve upon was breaking up your 'Google Search' and 'Data Broker' sections into more subcomponents. I really liked that discuss your attempts to find information about you by using two different search queries, but I think that putting your observations from both search queries in separate sections would make it easier to navigate. Similarly, in your data broker section, separating your discussion into 'accurate' vs. 'inaccurate' pieces of information you saw would help present your arguments more clearly. I really like how you discuss the unintended consequence of seeing falsified information about you despite your attempts to not have an online presence, so I would actually recommend making that into a separate section in your article. I think this could be a great place to bring in some of the readings on anonymity from this week's lectures as well. One last thing that I would recommend is taking some more time to proofread your piece. While the grammatical errors didn't hinder my understanding of your argument, there were a couple places throughout your article where there were spelling errors. Overall, great effort!