Talk:Brady Hicks

Jay Dayal

I think that this was well written and broken down in a way that makes sense. I like how you included sections about what the data brokers said about you and then what Google says. I also liked how you include a direct quote from Floridi to support why you believe that there is less information about you now than before when you were in high school. I think one place that you can improve upon is including more information about who you are so the reader knows what Google and data brokers are missing. Maybe you can also talk about why your relatives are showing up but not you. Another thing I think you can spend more time talking about is the information that comes up but is not true. You touched upon this briefly but you could go more in-depth and talk about why it came up and if there is anything in your life that may have prompted that to come up.

Bridget Doherty

Your opening statement about growing up in a small town “Because it was smaller, it was harder to keep many things private, but I think that helped me when it came to the expanse of the Internet,” was a compelling perspective and it really drew me into your analysis. You brought up an interesting point about how your increased knowledge of computer security affects your online profile. I think it would add more interest to the article if you expanded upon that thought because I think it has some interesting implications for the accuracy of data brokers and digital identity. Overall, I thought your writing style was clear and easy to follow. All of your thoughts were well translated. My only suggestion would be to expand upon some of your findings with additional content.