Difference between revisions of "Talk:Ben Tan"

Revision as of 19:01, 21 February 2018

Firstly, I would like to take a moment to appreciate the artistic value of your page's introduction: "This endeavor into my online identity has brought me to a single realization that I’ve always known but never admitted: the authentic version of me, the one I see in the mirror and attempt to describe herein, has never been truly portrayed in the virtual world." This was very well written and beautifully captures your emotions in reaction to discovering yourself.

Moving forward, the headers throughout your wiki page were very descriptive and directed me, as a reader, through your content very well. The headers pertaining to each of the social media sites were well labeled, as they included the name of the social media site which you talked about underneath as well as a short yet descriptive thought tacked on the end which gave me understanding to your identity on the site. The offered alternative “name,” or way of thinking about these sites in relation to your interaction and presence on them provides much information to readers even without reading your paragraphs.

Another aspect of your page which I enjoyed was that you didn’t just focus on your identity within one site, but three. In evaluating your social presence and identity over more sites I got a better idea of how you interact with different media as well as your overall online identity. Additionally, the depth of your writing was also relatively deep, yet concise, which is the opposite of what I initially expected due to the fact that there’s simply so much content that can be covered with three social media sites versus one.

However, I believe that the structuring of your page could be a little better and I will offer a few suggestions from my experience with it so far. The spacing between different elements needs to stay consistent. More specifically, I noticed that the top of the contents box was a little too close to your introduction and could use a little space between the two, just for consistency. Additionally, when the page is viewed full screen (viewing regularly, fully sized on a screen), all of the pictures from each section bleed into the next section. A fix for this would be placing the pictures slightly higher up within your page’s code. In doing this, I believe that your page will flow a little better. Furthermore, I’m not sure how I feel about the middle picture being formatted to the left side of the screen, as it shifts the text away from where it normally would be. This might just be a personal preference issue, but I thought it may be useful to mention. Lastly, be careful starting a page with blocks of text, as this has the tendency to cause readers to be overwhelmed and uninterested. However, I believe that due to the strength of your writing within the intro of your page, you have very little to worry about. Great work!

--Benjamin Zeffer