Difference between revisions of "Talk:Austin Cai"

Latest revision as of 19:45, 30 March 2017

Feedback from Chase

Austin, I thought this was a really interesting post. In reading over the posts of our class, the common theme seems to be people posting less than they did in middle school. It seems your case is an extreme version of this trend; you were intensely active in middle school and now have completely faded away from posting.

I think you did a great job of assessing the gap between your Facebook identity compared to your true identity. Additionally there seems to be a thorough description of how this gap has changed over time. For example in the middle school section, you describe how your online posts were not yourself, but instead a reflection of you doing whatever it took to be popular around school. Then in high school you characterize yourself as a “lurker” that never posts comments or photos. This shows a lack of identity on Facebook, once again a distancing of your online and true identity.

The article flows very well. I like the chronological nature of the format, as the article begins at the origin of your Facebook and spans to present day. This highlights how your content and identity have changed over time.

I would suggest adding more high quality pictures towards the bottom of your post. In the middle school section of your post, the pictures effectively illustrate what you are describing. But as the piece goes on there seems to be less high quality pictures that aid the reader in understanding your Facebook identity. For example, images of specific posts which illustrate how your Facebook had become a “Fakebook” could make your post even stronger.

One additional small thing, is a potential typo in the “Now: Lurker” section. In "I just don't feel that my time should be wasted on a site that brings any significant benefits into my life”. Did you intend to say, “ that does not bring any significant benefits”.

Overall this is a very strong post that shows the evolution of your Facebook identity over time.

Feedback from Gauri

Austin, I thought your reflection of your identity on Facebook was very well thought out. It was not only easy to follow because of the chronological order with which you showed progression in your identity, but it was a comical read because you offered insight of your thoughts throughout the autobiography.

I especially enjoyed learning about your identity in real life throughout middle school and high school in conjunction with how you used Facebook. Instead of using Facebook merely because others were using it, you used it in a strategic way to help grow your popularity amongst your classmates. I thought your effort in intermingling these two aspects was well executed. Additionally, I thought your use of illustrations and captions added to the writing and made your autobiography easier to understand and more interesting.

The quality of your writing was well crafted, with very minimal to almost no grammatical errors. Your conclusion was intelligent--again rerouting to how your use of Snapchat may have gone from using it occasionally to now placing emotion in it much like you once did with Facebook. Since you also mentioned LinkedIn, I think it would have been interesting to read about the differences in your social online presence and professional online presence.

However, I felt that this was a well executed autobiography and demonstrated your use of Facebook and how it relates to your identity.