Difference between revisions of "Talk:Ashley Bock"

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Ashley, you did a great job of connecting the idea of audience with the notion of one’s motivations for using a social platform. You made this connection clear when you explained how you use Instagram as a platform for marketing yourself to potential employers. I thought the review of your content in relation to the features and norms of the platform made for a strong analysis. You also did a fantastic job formatting your text and media for a wiki platform (the drop cap was a nice touch).

For your revision, I would encourage you to go even further in your analysis of the self-censorship that occurs as you try to stay “on-brand.” I would also suggest thinking a bit about what it really means to have a “personal brand.” Besides defining your aesthetic and taste, which you’ve done well in your original entry, your revision might benefit from a deeper exploration of your own personal values and how those values direct what does and doesn’t get posted on your account. Overall, I think this entry represents a strong assessment of your Instagram account relative to your “real identity.” Your entry can be further strengthened by making just a few tweaks (see minor edits below) and elaborating further on “brand” and personal values.

Minor edits:

• You have one instance of the word “Instagram” that isn’t capitalized
• You may want to consider reducing your reliance on the dash “—” in your sentence structures
• Try formatting your footnotes in the typical wiki style (using superscript numbers in brackets)

-- Samuel Wood

Hi Ashley! my comments are coming soon.

-- Andy Bui