Talk:Andrew Sylora

Overall I thought your facebook autobiographic analysis was interesting to read, and had these comments/suggestions about it:

- Watch out for spelling/grammar mistakes

- The first paragraph could have more flow. Skips around a lot and feels pinned together

- "Additionally, his profile picture may indicate he is a fan of graffiti and/or urban culture. This seems in contrast with his 73 likes, of which include the MPowered student organization and another unidentifiable group." Why does this contrast? I don't understand.

- The secondary elements you talk about (your profile pic, your liking of Mpowered, your liking of an electronic music producer) are not secondary elements. They are things you control, so they are primary.

- Your “behind the profile” tells us little about who you are. You talk more about how you utilize facebook than what facebook tells us about you. Give us insight, analysis.

- You touch briefly on the fact that most of your photos aren't of you because you don't consider yourself photogenic; you could have gone into analysis of what that means about yourself easily.

- Good likes paragraph

- Groups paragraph is good too

You talk about topics of the lectures and cover many aspects of your profile, which is good, but could have gone deeper into the self-reflection.

-Craig Peters