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Hi Ananya! I really enjoyed your conversational tone throughout your essay as it made it engaging but also fun to read. I also loved that you broke your essay up into a variety of topics as it made navigating your argument much easier. One thing that I think you could improve upon is connecting your observations to readings in the course. For example, discussing your 'authentic vs. online self' using Shannon Vallor's article could be a way to tie in your observations about yourself via Google and your RocketReach profile. As a stylistic element, I would recommend bolding or italicizing some of the words you wish to highlight in your essay. Each paragraph has many ideas that are being discussed, so I think that highlighting a few keywords in each paragraph can help a reader better understand your argument and how it connects to other parts of your essay. In your <b>'Quick Google Search'</b> section, I think it would be interesting to see what search queries yielded information that was most accurate about you, especially as you discuss 'Ananya Sharma' being a common name. Overall, I think you did a great job discussing your personal observations, but I would also think about how you can connect them to the readings in the course. Good work! | Hi Ananya! I really enjoyed your conversational tone throughout your essay as it made it engaging but also fun to read. I also loved that you broke your essay up into a variety of topics as it made navigating your argument much easier. One thing that I think you could improve upon is connecting your observations to readings in the course. For example, discussing your 'authentic vs. online self' using Shannon Vallor's article could be a way to tie in your observations about yourself via Google and your RocketReach profile. As a stylistic element, I would recommend bolding or italicizing some of the words you wish to highlight in your essay. Each paragraph has many ideas that are being discussed, so I think that highlighting a few keywords in each paragraph can help a reader better understand your argument and how it connects to other parts of your essay. In your <b>'Quick Google Search'</b> section, I think it would be interesting to see what search queries yielded information that was most accurate about you, especially as you discuss 'Ananya Sharma' being a common name. Overall, I think you did a great job discussing your personal observations, but I would also think about how you can connect them to the readings in the course. Good work! | ||
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| + | Ananya — I think you laid out your data identity very well. The formatting flowed well, sections made sense, and pictures were really well integrated. You gave a good amount of detail on your background and growth, and it was super cool to read about your golf background. | ||
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| + | I would have liked to hear a little bit more about how your digital self differed from your real self! What kinds of misinformation are out there? Or, alternatively, if you analyzed digital evidence from the perspective of someone who had never met you before, what would that reveal? How does your image differ across the social media platforms that you use (or, alternatively, if your image is the same across these platforms, how?) and do you think reflecting on your image will change your usage habits? Why or why not? It might also be interesting to explore why you use the social media platforms that you do. If you were to go down this path, it might be fun to include a few screenshots of these separate platforms so we have a visual aid to visualize your image. | ||
Latest revision as of 16:42, 19 February 2020
Kavya Pratapa's Comments
Hi Ananya! I really enjoyed your conversational tone throughout your essay as it made it engaging but also fun to read. I also loved that you broke your essay up into a variety of topics as it made navigating your argument much easier. One thing that I think you could improve upon is connecting your observations to readings in the course. For example, discussing your 'authentic vs. online self' using Shannon Vallor's article could be a way to tie in your observations about yourself via Google and your RocketReach profile. As a stylistic element, I would recommend bolding or italicizing some of the words you wish to highlight in your essay. Each paragraph has many ideas that are being discussed, so I think that highlighting a few keywords in each paragraph can help a reader better understand your argument and how it connects to other parts of your essay. In your 'Quick Google Search' section, I think it would be interesting to see what search queries yielded information that was most accurate about you, especially as you discuss 'Ananya Sharma' being a common name. Overall, I think you did a great job discussing your personal observations, but I would also think about how you can connect them to the readings in the course. Good work!
Sam Lu's Comments
Ananya — I think you laid out your data identity very well. The formatting flowed well, sections made sense, and pictures were really well integrated. You gave a good amount of detail on your background and growth, and it was super cool to read about your golf background.
I would have liked to hear a little bit more about how your digital self differed from your real self! What kinds of misinformation are out there? Or, alternatively, if you analyzed digital evidence from the perspective of someone who had never met you before, what would that reveal? How does your image differ across the social media platforms that you use (or, alternatively, if your image is the same across these platforms, how?) and do you think reflecting on your image will change your usage habits? Why or why not? It might also be interesting to explore why you use the social media platforms that you do. If you were to go down this path, it might be fun to include a few screenshots of these separate platforms so we have a visual aid to visualize your image.
