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| − | Hi Ananya! I really enjoyed your conversational tone throughout your essay as it made it engaging but also fun to read. I also loved that you broke your essay up into a variety of topics as it made navigating your argument much easier. One thing that I think you could improve upon is connecting your observations to readings in the course. For example, discussing your 'authentic vs. online self' using Shannon Vallor's article could be a way to tie in your observations about yourself via Google and your RocketReach profile. As a stylistic element, I would recommend bolding or italicizing some of the words you wish to highlight in your essay. Each paragraph has many ideas that are being discussed, so I think that highlighting a few keywords in each paragraph can help a reader better understand your argument and how it connects to other parts of your essay. In your 'Quick Google Search' section, I think it would be interesting to see what search queries yielded information that was most accurate about you, especially as you discuss 'Ananya Sharma' being a common name. Overall, I think you did a great job discussing your personal observations, but I would also think about how you can connect them to the readings in the course. Good work! | + | Hi Ananya! I really enjoyed your conversational tone throughout your essay as it made it engaging but also fun to read. I also loved that you broke your essay up into a variety of topics as it made navigating your argument much easier. One thing that I think you could improve upon is connecting your observations to readings in the course. For example, discussing your 'authentic vs. online self' using Shannon Vallor's article could be a way to tie in your observations about yourself via Google and your RocketReach profile. As a stylistic element, I would recommend bolding or italicizing some of the words you wish to highlight in your essay. Each paragraph has many ideas that are being discussed, so I think that highlighting a few keywords in each paragraph can help a reader better understand your argument and how it connects to other parts of your essay. In your <b>'Quick Google Search'</b> section, I think it would be interesting to see what search queries yielded information that was most accurate about you, especially as you discuss 'Ananya Sharma' being a common name. Overall, I think you did a great job discussing your personal observations, but I would also think about how you can connect them to the readings in the course. Good work! |
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Kavya Pratapa's Comments
Hi Ananya! I really enjoyed your conversational tone throughout your essay as it made it engaging but also fun to read. I also loved that you broke your essay up into a variety of topics as it made navigating your argument much easier. One thing that I think you could improve upon is connecting your observations to readings in the course. For example, discussing your 'authentic vs. online self' using Shannon Vallor's article could be a way to tie in your observations about yourself via Google and your RocketReach profile. As a stylistic element, I would recommend bolding or italicizing some of the words you wish to highlight in your essay. Each paragraph has many ideas that are being discussed, so I think that highlighting a few keywords in each paragraph can help a reader better understand your argument and how it connects to other parts of your essay. In your 'Quick Google Search' section, I think it would be interesting to see what search queries yielded information that was most accurate about you, especially as you discuss 'Ananya Sharma' being a common name. Overall, I think you did a great job discussing your personal observations, but I would also think about how you can connect them to the readings in the course. Good work!
