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Latest revision as of 20:17, 31 March 2017

Allison, I really enjoyed reading through your article! I like how you have kind of broken down the social norm barriers and are not afraid to post very often. I also really like how you portray yourself as authentic and always stay true to yourself. I would say I am quite similar in how we use Facebook as a platform, I think its a great place advocate for any cause. Inspiring and positively motivating others if what I think I love the most about Facebook.

As a whole I think your article was a great read but in terms of what I think you could improve on, I would say possibly the structure or organization could have been arranged a little differently and allowed for an easier read. I know the picture are very hard to organize, but maybe separating them and wrapping text could have made it easier for the reader. I think it would have also helped to add maybe one section to really analyze what you post before going into the Authentically, Me section. Other than that I really like how your analyzed the theme confession online in terms of your profile. I give you props for your willingness to share those events of your life to help spread awareness. Overall, great job Allison!

Best, Alissa E.


Allison, I really appreciate the honest, personal, and conversational tone throughout your Avatar. Your notion that Facebook became less relevant as soon as our parents logged on feels true, as does your nostalgic reflection on the former norms of 'Status' posting. Furthermore, I appreciate how authentic your online portrayal seems to be. Your willingness to share the posts in the 'Confessions' section is brave, and it proves that you're not one to curate content in a way that disguises real-life's hardships.

In your revisions, I suggest that you dive deeper into the analysis of your 'Confessions.' Such awareness posts seem extremely common on social media, and it would be interesting to explore why people feel particularly enabled by the platforms to broadcast such personal information. Moreover, as Alissa mentioned above, you can expand on other sections, such as your analyses of your posts, so that your conclusion feels even more special and wholistic.

Well Done! - Sal DiGioia



Hi Allison,

I think your post did an excellent job on illustrating your point - although there could be countless reasons why we want to limit the amount, or at least filter many of the contents of our posts on social medias, such as the complexity of the friend types, or the unspoken rule you mentioned, using it as most actively engaging and authentic as you can no matter what others might think about gives you the most rewarding results. This experiment is really interesting and worth deeply thinking. Often times, we worried too much on posting something on social medias because of the norms that are not actually there and very few of us attempted to break those norms to see what will happen. Perhaps the online world is not as bad and dangerous as we think it is - we are just exaggerating the consequences. So I see your courage and honest as part of your personalities from your posts as well as your way of managing your posts and the thoughts you got from it. I hope you can insist on your experiment and I think a lot of us should try it as well. It is not only an attempt to experiment on the online world but also an opportunity to face and reflect on the real selves.

The only weakness of this post, from my perspective, is that some of the pictures are too small for people to read the contents. I think a lot of them are good examples of your idea and you might want to represent them more clearly so that we can better understand your thoughts. So maybe you want to rearrange the structure of the posts to make it clearer.


By Zhewen Song


Alllie --

I really liked the way you discussed how you personally dealt with the mental health community via Facebook. Having read your statuses and seen the things you've posted on the topic, I liked reading your analysis and thought it was very well thought out. I think your point about actively using the platform for positive purposes was really an important sentiment, and overall I think most people who are regularly using Facebook would benefit from keeping that perspective in mind. If I were to give any suggestions, it would be to flesh out your Confessions section because I thought there are still a lot of different things that you could talk about in regards to discussing more personal business online.

Great job! -- Lauren Guldan