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| + | I really appreciate the honest, personal, and conversational tone throughout your Avatar. Your notion that Facebook became less relevant as soon as our parents logged on feels true, as does your nostalgic reflection on the former norms of 'Status' posting. Furthermore, I appreciate how authentic your online portrayal seems to be. Your willingness to share the posts in the 'Confessions' section is brave, and it proves that you're not one to curate content in a way that disguises real-life's hardships. | ||
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| + | In your revisions, I suggest that you dive deeper into the analysis of your 'Confessions.' Such awareness posts seem extremely common on social media, and it would be interesting to explore why people feel particularly enabled by the platforms to broadcast such personal information. Moreover, as Alissa mentioned above, you can expand on other sections, such as your analyses of your posts, so that your conclusion feels even more special and wholistic. | ||
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| + | Well Done! - Sal DiGioia | ||
Revision as of 18:51, 31 March 2017
Allison, I really enjoyed reading through your article! I like how you have kind of broken down the social norm barriers and are not afraid to post very often. I also really like how you portray yourself as authentic and always stay true to yourself. I would say I am quite similar in how we use Facebook as a platform, I think its a great place advocate for any cause. Inspiring and positively motivating others if what I think I love the most about Facebook.
As a whole I think your article was a great read but in terms of what I think you could improve on, I would say possibly the structure or organization could have been arranged a little differently and allowed for an easier read. I know the picture are very hard to organize, but maybe separating them and wrapping text could have made it easier for the reader. I think it would have also helped to add maybe one section to really analyze what you post before going into the Authentically, Me section. Other than that I really like how your analyzed the theme confession online in terms of your profile. I give you props for your willingness to share those events of your life to help spread awareness. Overall, great job Allison!
Best, Alissa E.
Allison,
I really appreciate the honest, personal, and conversational tone throughout your Avatar. Your notion that Facebook became less relevant as soon as our parents logged on feels true, as does your nostalgic reflection on the former norms of 'Status' posting. Furthermore, I appreciate how authentic your online portrayal seems to be. Your willingness to share the posts in the 'Confessions' section is brave, and it proves that you're not one to curate content in a way that disguises real-life's hardships.
In your revisions, I suggest that you dive deeper into the analysis of your 'Confessions.' Such awareness posts seem extremely common on social media, and it would be interesting to explore why people feel particularly enabled by the platforms to broadcast such personal information. Moreover, as Alissa mentioned above, you can expand on other sections, such as your analyses of your posts, so that your conclusion feels even more special and wholistic.
Well Done! - Sal DiGioia
