Difference between revisions of "Talk:Alexa Sonnenblick"
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| + | Hi Alexa, you did a great job in integrating your personality into this assignment. I very much enjoyed the tone and style. Each section is very well written and separated although, I would recommend adding more relevant images. Your idea of what information makes up a person is intriguing, and I wish you would have gone further into reflecting upon it. You can easily connect a theme from the course to not only improve the quality of your piece, but in a way that could further explain what information really makes up a person. Despite the few adjustments I recommend you have done a great job in writing a creative and thought provoking piece. | ||
Revision as of 21:43, 19 February 2019
Sophie Hoffman's comments
Hi Alexa,
Your introduction is very unique and creative, great job with that! In your second paragraph, you do a lot of personal reflection which is an important component of the assignment, but the opening would be a great place to take a stance too, on the implications of your search or your findings. It would even be a good place to introduce a course concept.
The second section (data brokers) does a great job of exploring the implications of the existence of online data brokers. Somewhere in the second paragraph could also be a good place to introduce a course concept to strengthen your argument. The questions in your final paragraph are very interesting and thought provoking. I think it might even be beneficial to explore some of your own thoughts on how to answer them. Overall, your casual tone brings personality to the piece, great job!
Joanne Orozco's comments
Hi Alexa, you did a great job in integrating your personality into this assignment. I very much enjoyed the tone and style. Each section is very well written and separated although, I would recommend adding more relevant images. Your idea of what information makes up a person is intriguing, and I wish you would have gone further into reflecting upon it. You can easily connect a theme from the course to not only improve the quality of your piece, but in a way that could further explain what information really makes up a person. Despite the few adjustments I recommend you have done a great job in writing a creative and thought provoking piece.
