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Hello Akash, I enjoyed reading your statement. Overall, I think you did a good job discussing the information the data brokers were able to collect about you. I agree with your suspicions that the data broker system is underwhelming and only searches as much as it needs to. Many people have even found discrepancies between things like their age and birth date. In your expectations post you do a better job of connecting your statement with your personal life. I think you could improve this by expanding upon your personal beliefs regarding the use of your personal information online in the introduction. | Hello Akash, I enjoyed reading your statement. Overall, I think you did a good job discussing the information the data brokers were able to collect about you. I agree with your suspicions that the data broker system is underwhelming and only searches as much as it needs to. Many people have even found discrepancies between things like their age and birth date. In your expectations post you do a better job of connecting your statement with your personal life. I think you could improve this by expanding upon your personal beliefs regarding the use of your personal information online in the introduction. | ||
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| + | “My list of associates, however, was not nearly as accurate. I found it quite odd for one list to be so accurate and another to be completely false but I think this stems from how each list is curated.” I would be interested if you examined how this list came to be like how you validated the list of your neighbors. | ||
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| + | “Despite being born and raised in the United States, a lot of the information given about where I possibly went to school or where I possibly worked is based in India but not even from the parts of India that my family is from.” I would give specifics here just to prove your point. | ||
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| + | You bring up instances of misinformation and how the misinformation is not public/common information. I think a valuable section to add would be how the data broker works to make those connections (like the connection between you and Akash from Chennai) | ||
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| + | Your first paragraph in expectations brings up some great points. However, there is some disconnect between the first and second half. I would advise breaking them up (one about your missing data, one about why you suspect the data is missing, and your final thoughts) and drawing more of a connection between your points. Reading further, I would also do this with your analysis. This way your article will read better and create a more central theme. | ||
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| + | “I do think that it reveals what I value as a person.” You bring up a good point in this section. I would just elaborate why you think this, so there are no gaps in your reading. | ||
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| + | Overall, I think you took an interesting approach to a weak data broker profile which made this article enjoyable to read. | ||
Latest revision as of 22:05, 26 February 2020
Ruth Moon
Hello Akash, I enjoyed reading your statement. Overall, I think you did a good job discussing the information the data brokers were able to collect about you. I agree with your suspicions that the data broker system is underwhelming and only searches as much as it needs to. Many people have even found discrepancies between things like their age and birth date. In your expectations post you do a better job of connecting your statement with your personal life. I think you could improve this by expanding upon your personal beliefs regarding the use of your personal information online in the introduction.
Bridget Doherty
“My list of associates, however, was not nearly as accurate. I found it quite odd for one list to be so accurate and another to be completely false but I think this stems from how each list is curated.” I would be interested if you examined how this list came to be like how you validated the list of your neighbors.
“Despite being born and raised in the United States, a lot of the information given about where I possibly went to school or where I possibly worked is based in India but not even from the parts of India that my family is from.” I would give specifics here just to prove your point.
You bring up instances of misinformation and how the misinformation is not public/common information. I think a valuable section to add would be how the data broker works to make those connections (like the connection between you and Akash from Chennai)
Your first paragraph in expectations brings up some great points. However, there is some disconnect between the first and second half. I would advise breaking them up (one about your missing data, one about why you suspect the data is missing, and your final thoughts) and drawing more of a connection between your points. Reading further, I would also do this with your analysis. This way your article will read better and create a more central theme.
“I do think that it reveals what I value as a person.” You bring up a good point in this section. I would just elaborate why you think this, so there are no gaps in your reading.
Overall, I think you took an interesting approach to a weak data broker profile which made this article enjoyable to read.
