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| + | I really enjoyed reading your post. I like the fact that your personality still comes through in your writing and yet it still manages to sound like an academic paper. Your paper definitely shows your effort in doing searches on yourself. However, in addition to expressing your reaction to your discoveries, I wish you can include more analyses on the topic of information ethics. I like when you shared that you are troubled by how data brokers blithely gave out other people's address, phone number, and email information. But how about your own information? Do you feel your privacy was violated when other people can know those privacy information about you? Do you feel misrepresented when the data broker incorrectly attached your mom's email address to you? I hope that in your later revisions you can touch on these subjects more. In terms of the overall style of the post, I like how you broke up your post into sections and gave each a section title. It makes me feel that the post is shorter than it actually is (in a good way) and also allows me to follow your thought process pretty easily. | ||
Revision as of 23:25, 17 February 2019
Your page is really nicely organized! The contents box and structure of your data identity statement is clean and straightforward. Your first paragraph is a great opener as it starts your statement off by introducing ideas about privacy and also incorporating Floridi. I’d be interested to see if the results from other data brokers would have the same information as Instant Checkmate. Perhaps you could research into this more and report on it. I would also consider focusing a bit more on the data you did collect on yourself or others and put less emphasis on your reactions to the information (or lack of information) found. The Facebook soccer fan part was funny and if you could elaborate more on Facebook’s techniques I think that’d really strengthen your argument and add more insight. As a more general note, I would try to incorporate more about ethics throughout your piece. Overall, you do a good job of discussing how your online presence reflects and represents your offline presence! You end your statement on a strong note!
Commenter: Ashley Carroll (ashleyac)
I really enjoyed reading your post. I like the fact that your personality still comes through in your writing and yet it still manages to sound like an academic paper. Your paper definitely shows your effort in doing searches on yourself. However, in addition to expressing your reaction to your discoveries, I wish you can include more analyses on the topic of information ethics. I like when you shared that you are troubled by how data brokers blithely gave out other people's address, phone number, and email information. But how about your own information? Do you feel your privacy was violated when other people can know those privacy information about you? Do you feel misrepresented when the data broker incorrectly attached your mom's email address to you? I hope that in your later revisions you can touch on these subjects more. In terms of the overall style of the post, I like how you broke up your post into sections and gave each a section title. It makes me feel that the post is shorter than it actually is (in a good way) and also allows me to follow your thought process pretty easily.
