Talk:Adaku Anaele

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Comments from Cooper Stevens

Hi, Adaku! I really enjoyed reading about your progression of how you discovered your online data identity. I think the personal tone of your writing really contributed to my relatability and understanding of your data identity statement! You have made it clear the ways in which your data identity is up-to-date with the real you, and the ways in which it is out-of-date. I've also gathered that your "theme" is that one's data identity should not be used to inform on their real identity because it can often be an inaccurate representation of how they are in real life. However, I only realized that this was your theme in your last sentence in your conclusion. As such, I would suggest presenting this theme in your introduction, and echoing it throughout your evidence (i.e. information you found on Google from a search). Such a change might even require a reframing of your evidence so that is framed and presented with this theme in mind. Some other changes I might suggest are adding more links to make this look like a Wikipedia page, and I found a typo in your introduction "can not".


Comments from Ruben Lugo

Hey Adaku, it was interesting to read your data identity statement since many of the points you made were relatable to my own data identity. I also prefer to keep many of my social media profiles private because of potential stalking or future job opportunities. On platforms like twitter I do not have my real name intentionally so my profile is not easily found. I thought in this respect our data identity was pretty similar. I want to complement your writing in this statement because I really liked how you emphasized the reliability, or lack there of, of the information that is online about you. I thought your subsections made sense and strengthened the general flow of your statement. Overall, I enjoyed reading your data identity statement and thought it was a great piece of writing.