Talk:Abbey Warren

Hi Abbey - First, I'd like to say that I think the structure of your autobiography is very easy to follow and I like that you started off by describing how your profile pictures each represent a different phase of your life. I think profile pictures are a huge part of Facebook so this structure flowed well and made sense to me.

I also like that you talked from a third-person perspective and were able to criticize your past self like when you say some posts "showcased her childishness", but throughout the post you switch to a first-person point of view unexpectedly, whereas I thought it may have been more effective to just stick with one voice throughout.

My favorite portion was the discussion on "friends" and the way you explained how different friends taught you different things in life. I thought this was insightful and showed that you really thought about the way your Facebook friends contributed to your identity. Your ending was strong as well because you tied in all of your identities (the different Abbey's) and leave the reader wanting to find out more.

Overall, I thought you did a nice job describing how Facebook does show who you are as a person, but that this person is always changing therefore Facebook may never capture who you are in the current moment. Good work! - Joana

Hey Abbey,

First of all, you autobiography has a really great tone to it. It's casual and engaging, and I got a really strong sense of personality from your word choice. Your writing also had a really nice flow to it. It was well organized and I feel like the different sections all flowed really nicely into one another. I was also a fan of the way you switched between first and third person. It was a really creative way of emphasizing the difference between the person you are now and the people that you used to be.

It was also really clear that you'd put a lot of thought into your reflection. I was specifically a fan of the way you used your friends list as a way of showing what (and who) was important to you at various times in your life. That's such an interesting idea - I spent quite a lot of time on this assignment, and using my friends list as a source never even occurred to me! You also did a very good job of sticking to the theme throughout, and the idea that you explored - that Facebook doesn't completely accurately portray you because you're no longer the same person as you were even a few minutes ago - is incredibly interesting.

My only critique is that I feel like you could have engaged with your central idea a bit sooner, and gone a bit more in depth at certain points. Specifically, the sections about pictures left me with some questions after I first read it. I initially didn't quite understand what you meant whiny said that there was a different Abbey in each picture, even if they were taken moments apart. It made a lot more sense after I'd continued reading and got farther into your analysis, but it initially threw me off a bit. Also, I thought that your analysis of your profile pictures was great. I like the way that you linked your profile picture with the type of person that you used to be, but I have to wonder, was this how you meant to be portrayed all along? Like, did your old self specifically choose pictures that portrayed you in a certain light, or are you only now looking back and discerning what your photos said about you?

Overall, though, excellent job! I really enjoyed reading it.

Kathryn Clark