John Walsh Thesis Revision

This page is an exercise in revising a massively plagiarized master's thesis by paraphrasing portions of the text that were either quoted without attribution (no citation) or quoted inappropriately (no quotation marks). In both cases we will re-write individual paragraphs and deposit the results here, by page number.

Here is a link to the New York Times article.

Instructions:

John Walsh plagiarism damage control

1. Type on your personal notebook a piece of text (paragraph) from the page represented in the New York Times article of July 23, 2014.
2. Edit to rephrase in your own words, avoiding close paraphrasing as much as possible.
3. Cut and past results into this document on the proper page in the proper order, if possible.
4. Do minor formatting or editing as needed.
5. BONUS. If you are editing a passage without attribution, insert the reference.

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During George W. Bush's time as president, few believed that he would focus on the advancement of democracy. During 2001, the Bush administration did not even address the issue of promoting civil societies, rule of law, free elections and open political processes as major issues of their agenda. Early on, Bush and his team made it evident that they would not put heavy emphasis on fostering democracy, but rather they would focus on "great-power realism." In Bush's next term, he began by expressing that there would be a great focus on foreign policy through a large push toward achieving world peace. As a result, in early 2005, Bush released new policies which are now referred to as the Bush Doctrine. Though the policies were new, the foundation was not. The belief that bettering democracy outside of one's country to ensure safety within one's country is not a new idea. In his inaugural address on January 20, President George W. Bush declared that "it is the policy of the United States to seek and support the growth of democratic movements and institutions in every nation and culture, with the ultimate goal of ending tyranny in our world."

"Those who believe that a democratic Middle East is possible are few in number. Within certain sectors of America, and nearly everywhere outside of America, the voices of skepticism are growing. Many have questioned whether the democratic world has a right to impose its values on a region that is said to reject them. Many have argued that military intervention in the Middle East is causing more harm than good."

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This project will provide a valid argument that the United States must continue to pursue democracy in the Middle East as a key component of the National Security Strategy of the USA beyond January 20, 2009 when President Bush leaves office. Democracy is not a pure entity and the United States should not attempt to force democracy on other countries. (fn) The belief is that it is in the global interest for there to be more democratic countries. If the Bush doctrine is successful in laying the foundation for democracy in the region and elsewhere around the world, the spread of democracy in the Middle East will have to remain American policy beyond January 20, 2009. (fn) Patience is a must and if we have any hope of successfully promoting freedom as the alternative to tyranny and despair we must remain patient!

Defining Democracy

As the United States pursues democracy around the glove, it is important to understand the definition and concept of democracy. There are many disputes about the correct conceptual definition, about whether democracy is purely to elect leaders, about how we can calculate democracy, and the importance of the footwork for implementing democracy. (fn) Democracy is particularly challenging to define because it is not a physical substance, rather a form of rulership and an evolving form of governance(fn). There is a singular definition of democracy that is recognized in the US and much of the third world. As defined by the US State Department: "government by the people in whom the supreme power is vested in the people and exercised directly by them, or by their elected agents, under a free electoral system(fn).Representative Democracy is the most common, as it allows citizens to elect their representatives which indirectly gives power to the people in the government.

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While acknowledging that the basic elements of a democracy will be different based on the cultural, economic, and social systems found in a given society leaves room for some imprecision in the application of the definition, a working definition of democracy that is largely accepted by political scientists who endorse what is known as the Democratic Peace Theory amounts to: 1. The nation must hold competitive elections. To be defined as competitive, there must be at least two formally independent political parties (or similar groups). 2. 50% or more of the adult population must be allowed to vote. 3. Those in legislative and executive power must have been put into place by said elections. 4. There must have been at least one peaceful, constitutional transfer of power between independent political parties. Nations which do not meet all four conditions might be considered emerging democracies or republics, but would not be considered democracies until they met all four conditions.

While this definition of democracy is fairly strict, most nations that are considered democracies fit these criterion. Most nations that are not usually considered democracies, especially middle eastern nations, do not meet all of these criterion, and therefore can be considered protodemocracies. There are also some nations, for example North Korea, who do not meet any of these criterion.

This definition will also allow us to easily tell the difference between democracy and liberal democracy, under a liberal democracy the vast majority of adults must be eligible to vote, and freedom of political speech and press must be enshrined in the system of law. Thus the United States, for example, would not have qualified for "liberal democracy" status until the 19th amendment was ratified to give women the right to vote and it didn't fully meet the promises of liberal democracy until it guaranteed the franchise to blacks some 40 years ago.

A fundamental part of democracy is the ability of the people to elect and remove their leaders. This democratic movement has spread and now many countries hold such elections.

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The Links between Democracy and Security

In 1994 the Clinton administration endorsed and adopted the idea that there is a link between democracy and security. [23] In his 1994 State of the Union address President Clinton declared that "ultimately the best strategy to insure our security and to build a durable peace is to support the advance of democacy elsewhere." [24] A year earlier, Anthony Lake, then President Clinton's assistant for national security affairs, had called for replacing the Cold War strategy of containment with a "strategy of enlargement - enlargement of the world's community of market democracies." [25]

President Bush throughout his presidency has also consistently argued that there is an inextricable link between freedom and peace, and between democracy and security.

The Bush administration and its defenders contend that the push for Arab democracy in the Middle East will not only spread American values but also improve U.S. security. As democracy grows in the Middle East, the thinking goes, the region will stop generating anti-American terrorism. Promoting democracy in the Middle East is therefore not merely consistent with U.S. security goals; it is necessary to achieve them. [26]

Studies have shown effectively no historical cases of war between democracies. In his article from 1983, Michael Doyle investigates a list of liberal states and compares this against all international wars between 1816 and 1980. [27] He determines that "constitutionally secure liberal states have yet to engage in war with one another." [28] Subsequent studies confirm this lack of war between democratic entities with statistically significant results that are not the result of random chance. [29] Investigating other possible confounders, such as geographical proximity and wealth, other analyses agree these other variables do not detract from the significance of concluding democracies rarely go to war with another democracy.[30]

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area will cease to create anti-American terrorism. President Bush has confidence that furthering and encouraging democracy in the Middle East, not only coincides with the goals of U.S. security, but is crucial to achieve these goals.

President Bush's confidence in the connection between lack of democracy and terrorism is not restricted to his administration. Throughout the 2004 presidential campaign, Senator John Kerry highlighted the need for more political change in the Middle East as an crucial part of the war on terrorism. Morton Halperin, a main policy figure in the Clinton administration, beliefs that the source of al Qaeda lies in the poverty and inadequate education of countries like; Saudi Arabia, Egypt, and Pakistan, and were created by the oppressive nature of those countries and can be fought strictly through democratization.

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According to the State Department's annual "Patterns of Global Terrorism" report, 269 major terrorist attacks occurred in developed "free" countries, 119 occurred in "partly free" countries, and 138 occurred in "not free" countries classified by Freedom House.

Islam and Democracy

Islam and Democracy have a complex relationship in the modern world. The Muslim world consists of both individuals who deny a tie between Islam and democracy and individuals who that a democratic system would be beneficial to Islam. Although these are both opposite extreme ends of the spectrum, there are also individuals who lie in between these two extremes, who believe that Islam is a support for democracy even though their political system of choice is not defined as Islamic.

On the other hand, many Muslims argue that democracy is a requirement of Islam. Muslim scholars are searching through the Islamic tradition and are able to connect historically important topics to the basic concepts of democracy as applicable to the current state of democracy. These topics from Islamic tradition are considered to be the key to "Islamic democracy". Most people agree that there are different forms that democracy can take in a political system, so it is important for Muslims to create their own, new system unique of what non-Muslims have done in creating democratic systems in the past.

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At present, Islamic democracy is, at least in theory, developed and functional. However, it is less effective in practice.

Authoritarian rulers such as Ja'far Numayri in Sudan and Zia al-Haqq in Pakistan initiated formal programs of Islamization of the law and political system in the 1980s with results that were not encouraging for democracy. A military coup brought a combination of military and civilian Islamists to rule in Sudan in 1989 and despite the proclaimed goal of creating an Islamic democracy, the regime's human rights record in terms of treatment of non-Muslim minorities and Muslim opposition groups is deplorable.

During its first decade, the Islamic Republic set narrow limitations on political participation. However, the end of the nineties saw the unprecedented presidential election victory of Mohammad Khatami, who had not been favored by the conservative religious establishment. He was reelected by an overwhelming majority again in 2001. Although there are continuing grounds for criticizing Iran in terms of its repression of opposition and minorities, increasing numbers of women and youth are voting in elections. Instead of "one man, one vote, one time," the "one man" is being joined by "one woman" as a voting force.

In addition to formal Islamic systems of politics, democracy itself has been growing, with an Islamic flavor.

Many Muslims, whether living in formally secular or formally Islamic states, see democracy as their main hope and vehicle of effective political participation. One important dimension of this participation is that despite conservative Muslim opposition to the idea of rule by a woman, the three largest Muslim states in the world -- Indonesia, Bangladesh, and Pakistan -- have had or now have elected women as their heads of government. None of these women was explicitly Islamist and one was directly opposed by an Islamist party.

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For this effort, Arab leader and Arab democracy reformers from the United States, Europe and India must work together.

Arab Support for Democracy

Since the 1970's "third wave" of democratization, a myriad of countries have been observed as having a surge in support for governmental democratic structures. Support for democracy among Arab men and women, as shown in recent data from the World Values Survey in the middle east has had similar patterns to the observable trends of surging governmental democratic structures, supporting the claim that support of democracy across the Middle East is growing remarkably.

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Sustaining New Democracies

Even though the Middle East, compared to other regions, is still struggling with the development of free institutions, the growth since 9/11 is still cause for hope.

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...however sustaining democracy requires domestic initiative, as has been the case in countries such as Chile, Poland, South Africa, and the Phillipines. The transition relies highly on the initiative of a country's progressive leaders and citizens and requires the international community to support countries not by leading the way, but by supporting them from afar. Leadership in the Middle East is crucial to successful democratic transition and consolidation. One important role for international democracy supporters is to provide capacity building for new political leaders, including those in opposition to non-democratic regimes and those newly elected. The transitional period is especially critical, as democracy either takes root or flounders. Strong, political leadership is essential to establishing and sustaining democratic governance as new institutions and politicians emerge.

Recommendations

The United States' initiative to implement democracy in the Middle East will require the help of other democratic nations, and efforts must be sustained over the long term -- well beyond the end of President Bush's second term -- if there is any hope for success. It's important that we not set the bar too high and that we make our goals clear, as are the goals of any true democracy. It must be a priority for the United States to help countries in the Middle East prioritize citizens' political and civil rights and the wholesale institutional changes that instill democratic values across the government. The United States and other democracies must be willing to lend their expertise and experience to aid Middle Eastern countries in endeavors such as establishing political parties,

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The United States as well as the rest of the democratic countries around the world has an important role to play in fostering democracy in the Middle East region, but the task will be slow and difficult given the lack of leverage over key governments in the region. This should not be entered into lightly however as former US interventions in countries to establish democracies have not all been successful and on occasion worsened the situation, such as the 1994 U.S. invasion of Haiti which have led to renewed repression, political chaos, and poor US-Haiti relations. While there are some cases which could be considered situations where U.S. intervention was a positive force in establishing democracies such as Panama where after Noriega was installed, politics in the region had achieved some amount of pluralism. However, it can be said that Panama already had experienced some amount of pluralism before Noriega. The hope with intervention is that the pressure of international response will attenuate the risk of bad actors plotting to overthrow democratic institutions.

In the Middle East