John Walsh Thesis Revision

This page is an exercise in revising a massively plagiarized master's thesis by paraphrasing portions of the text that were either quoted without attribution (no citation) or quoted inappropriately (no quotation marks). In both cases we will re-write individual paragraphs and deposit the results here, by page number.

Here is a link to the New York Times article.

Instructions:

John Walsh plagiarism damage control

1. Type on your personal notebook a piece of text (paragraph) from the page represented in the New York Times article of July 23, 2014.
2. Edit to rephrase in your own words, avoiding close paraphrasing as much as possible.
3. Cut and past results into this document on the proper page in the proper order, if possible.
4. Do minor formatting or editing as needed.
5. BONUS. If you are editing a passage without attribution, insert the reference.

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While the idea that more democracies in the world would theoretically advance U.S. and global interests, the United States should remember that the concept of a democracy is neither inherently good or bad, it is neutral and the U.S. must be careful when attempting to spread democracy.

Defining Democracy The United States has spread democracy throughout the rest of society for a significant amount of time. Due to this, one can’t underestimate the significance of democracy, as its influence has been felt by many regions. Although its influence has been felt, there has been a wide range of opinions regarding democracy and its implementation. These disagreements range from framework to the founding variables. Since there is a wide disagreement on its founding values, theory, and prerequisites it can be difficult to come to a concrete definition.

Nowadays, there is a social calling for democracy and the sense of freedom it imbues. The countries of east Europe has gotten rid of totalitarian governments that lasted over fifty years.

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A fundamental method for accountability in a democracy is the ability to both elect and remove one’s leader; it is not sufficient to only have elections. In fact, the increase in the number of countries which consistently conduct fair and competitive elections is an incredible achievement of the modern democracy movement.

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War between democracies is not supported by historical studies. Michael Doyle’s 1983 article juxtaposes democratic states with international wars (1816–1980), concluding that “constitutionally secure liberal states have yet to engage in war with one another” (Doyle 1983). And this is not by chance: other studies have found the lack of violence statistically significant, even considering other variables, such as the relative wealth and geographic proximity of countries.

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Arabs are the leaders of their own democracy. A successful Arab democracy must come from the Arab and Islamic people. Arab officials and leaders themselves must come together and confront the present societal issues. The United States, Europe, and India need to support Arab democracy for it to truly thrive.