Talk:Rachel Westrick

Hi Rachel,

This is a good start and is certainly very comprehensive. You seem very data-savvy and aware of potential issues about the security of your data and information. I like how you brought up non-traditional sources to analyze your online profile like Yandex and DuckDuckGo--this is definitely something I want to consider when I work on my revision. The structure was clear and easy to follow too.

As you work on a revision, I think you could improve by making your theme more clear. When I finished your piece, I felt that I had missed what your central argument/thesis was. Your page felt more like a regurgitation of the information someone would find about you online, so I think you could explore these implications further. You could really distinguish your page by adding some discussion around ethics and what practices around data collection you think is morally acceptable. Perhaps consider supporting your argument with readings as well.

Overall, you clearly did your research, and this was a strong first go at the assignment!

-Evon Yao

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