Talk:Kyle Gericke

Hi Kyle!

I think you did a great job assessing your data identity. I really liked how you compared what was out there and rated how accurately you felt it depicted you. You mention a lot how you expected to find a lot of your information out there, and I think one way to improve this would be to mention a few things you thought would be available, why you felt this way, and why you feel they weren't available. If added, this will give the readers a better vision of your identity. I think the quality of writing is very high and it is very well done in that sense. This flows well and it is very logical in ordering, making it very easy to understand. You have no glaring grammar errors, which make it easy to read. However, some sentences are a little long, and I think shortening them or making them into two sentences will increase the readability by a little. Overall, really good job and I look forward to reading the final draft.

- Dylan Schwartz