Talk:Priyanka Khetarpal

I enjoyed reading your statement, especially since I could relate right away with your parents warning you about what you put on the internet. It was interesting that you brought up using different Google accounts for distinct purposes (as I didn’t think about that as much when thinking about my presence).

Your reflection and conclusion both bring up good points about whether one’s activity on social media or lack thereof comes at a cost. Also, describing yourself as more of an absorber versus producer of information was another interesting point. It would be beneficial to bring in some outside sources on these subjects or include some kind of graph image on global/national social media usage (the Global Digital Report 2019 should have this). I could see this argument being fleshed out even more throughout the statement.

Overall your writing tone and structure both worked well in terms of being easy to read and also in painting a picture of your search process and reactions to the results. Adding 2-3 images would also help with the illustration of your statement.

Best,
Natalie Lampa (nlampa)

Hi Priyanka,

Great job on this piece overall. I like how you explain the commonness of having some information online but why you may have some less than others. I am also quite curious as to what recruiters may find knowing full well that they may be taking the same methods as you did in this assignment.

I am going to guess that this "This assignment was very intriguing for me because I wanted to explore just how much personal information there was on me, being someone who made a conscious effort at the creation of their various social media accounts to not divulge personal information." was your main point? I would have went just a bit deeper to summarize your efforts and findings into what you are trying to argue. What you say in the reflection and conclusion can be mentioned and referred to in the introductions and body paragraphs to give a better flow. I like the arguments that were presented there.

I was very intrigued with what you found in your Google Ad profiles. I have never thought of separating my school and personal accounts but may start doing so after your suggestions. The apparent differences that you bring up between the two profiles really increases as evidence for your argument.

I would have loved to see a deeper dive into the Data Brokers section beyond the last paragraph. Your findings through instant checkmate and LinkedIn could be better tied into the quotes from Floridi instead of it being two separate paragraphs.

Beyond a few grammar errors that can be easily cleaned up, great job Priyanka!

-Rachel Chang