Talk:Alexa Sonnenblick

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Sophie Hoffman's comments

Hi Alexa,
Your introduction is very unique and creative, great job with that! In your second paragraph, you do a lot of personal reflection which is an important component of the assignment, but the opening would be a great place to take a stance too, on the implications of your search or your findings. It would even be a good place to introduce a course concept.
The second section (data brokers) does a great job of exploring the implications of the existence of online data brokers. Somewhere in the second paragraph could also be a good place to introduce a course concept to strengthen your argument. The questions in your final paragraph are very interesting and thought provoking. I think it might even be beneficial to explore some of your own thoughts on how to answer them. Overall, your casual tone brings personality to the piece, great job!

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