Talk:Dustin Lee

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Benjamin Carney's Comments

Hi Dustin! I really enjoyed your wiki article. The nature of your background and how much you've moved around throughout your lifetime definitely made for a unique set of results (or lack thereof). Initially this lack of results might seem like an obstacle to formulating a substantial reflection, however I think this could be a really good opportunity for you tap into even deeper perspectives that reflect your unique scenario.

If I were to offer a few suggestions as to how you might improve your article, the first would be to expand upon your "Discussion" section. With just under 850 words written so far, there should be plenty of room for you to expand upon some of the prompts provided in the assignment document. For instance, you could further explore what parts of your digital identity accurately represented your physical identity.

My second suggestion would be try and create a stronger link between some of the concepts you cited in your "Discussion" section and how they relate to your particular data identity. It was great that you were able to find some connection between this assignment and some of Floridi's work, however I had trouble fully understanding what that connection was and how it was relevant to your results. Again, because you still have plenty of space left in your article, you shouldn't have much trouble further articulating your points.

My final suggestion would be to introduce these theoretical concepts earlier in the article so that the reader has a chance to draw the connections as they read your work. In my opinion, they were presented a little too suddenly towards the end, and ultimately left me expecting more by the time I was done reading them. Working them in as you present your findings also may be a good way to get your point across.

Best of luck in your revision!