Talk:Emily Wang
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First Comment - Pavel Borisov
Content
Writing Quality
Formatting
I do not get the impression that the illustrations help present the profile well. The Audem Designs one is very clear at displaying your company as something part of your identity,
Style
Although the writing does not flow well, it is brief and to the point which is good. This could be taken further by omitting the birthdate in the first paragraph as it is already in the
