Talk:Aaron Fogle

First Comment - Pavel Borisov

Content

I'm impressed by how forward you are with your page and your facebook profile, especially with the admission that you're trying to portray a certain image.

Style

The writing doesn't click too well with me for a number reasons, the first being that the use use of formatting and media on this page is throwing it off. One example of this is the included image captioned "My profile viewed from a stranger's point of view". It doesn't need to be as large as it is right now, and should be a thumbnail or smaller size instead, ideally included in an identity template. Right now it squashes text into an inconvenient column on any browser window less than 3/4 of my 1680 x 1050 display. The facebook chat screencap is less disruptive and actually fits very nicely into the section it's in. My main problem with it is that its current combination of size and caption does not clearly illustrate what is going on without a clickthrough. This could be remedied by briefly describing what keeping the facebook chat off reflects about you. I know this might be redundant, but it would allow you to keep the current image proportions and neat arrangement without disrupting.

The second issue is that the writing style was a little long-winded. However, even if the flow as slow, it was mostly smooth and unbroken. Although there are breaks are at the start of the Photo Albums section and at the start of the Social Participation and Influence section, these are handled by titles so it doesn't jar me too much.

Second Comment- Gabrielle Carels

To come soon