Talk:Philip Norris

Hi Phil,

Nice job with this assignment! Very interesting story, I say story because you did a good job bringing the reader through time, of how you first used and represented yourself on facebook to your use today. It maintained a clear and logical flow and had a genuine style and voice. I liked that you included your first profile picture, and used captions on your photos. Since this is on a media wiki I could suggest adding headers to add more structure, but I also liked how you didn't include any, which gave a wholeness to your story.

I think you did a good job going into depth and detail about your use and thoughts about Facebook and your identity, such as offline and online Phil. And I think it is then interesting how you use third person narration in the status's you included. Which is consistent in how you thought of yourself as in two different places. In all you did a really thorough job in describing how your real identity has converged and diverged with the identity you present online! I like the line, "This is when Facebook Phil and the real Phil hit a fork in the road"

A section that could be interesting to add would be what you think your use would be in the future, such as if you will put future relationships on Facebook?

Also if you ever went through and did any kind of Facebook "clean up" where you deleted any of your old statuss or pictures or defriended any of the people you didn't really know

Overall great job though! -Chloe

Hi Phil,

I think you did a good job at describing your Facebook timeline. Your writing tone and style flowed well. You also did a great job of describing your story by relating your personal relationship in your post, Through this, I was able to imagine your online identity. Your Facebook persona seems aligned with your true identity. As far as the readability of your avatar page, from the day you first created your Facebook page to present time, you organized and illustrated it into one big storyline and I felt it was a little too long for a wiki style of writing. As the other student previously commented, I would suggest you breaking down your story to smaller segments, so that it is little easier to follow. However, I have to admit, I can clearly see how your online identity matures in this way. Overall, your post seems sincere, but it would be better if you add some ethical implications by elaborating your reasoning behind why you don’t want to post your emotions online anymore. Posting only certain items online may raise the issue of your online authenticity because this could misrepresent your true identity.

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