Talk:Eye Tracking
Hi Amelia,
I think the topic you chose is very interesting. Below is a peer review of your article.
Length
The current state of the article is between 400-500 words in length and will require 3000 in the final draft. I see there are some headings that contain no content currently. The length will significantly increase after adding more information to the Head Stabilized Eye-Tracking, Remote Eye-Tracking, Mobile Eye-Tracking, and Integrated and embedded systems sections of the draft. If the article needs more length after adding the sections listed above a suggestion is to add more information to the History section. I find this section quite interesting to read and think the article could benefit from a more in depth history of eye tracking, how it came about, and its intended purpose. I also noticed the author talks about Google Glass, and could add more eye tracking technologies to discuss such as Tobii. The Ethical Concerns section could add more elaboration to increase length as well.
Structure
I believe the section called Eye Tracking is intended to be the opening paragraph that summarizes the topic. If so it should be placed before the contents section at the top of the page. The article does include a body with more than one section. The author included references at the end of the article. I suggest adding in-text reference links to identify which information is coming from where. It makes it easier for the reader to identify a specific source if they choose to seek more information about the topic. I think there are examples in the Algorithms article that the author can refer to. I think the opening paragraph successfully describes the topic in a concise way. The headings for the body of the article make sense and appear to have a logical flow from summary, to history, to ethics, and examples. Throughout the entirety of the article the author could add some more links and bold words that are important vocabulary related to the topic. For example, “Eye Tracking” could be bolded in the Eye Tracking section. It also may be nice to have links to Wikipedia about the individuals mentioned in the article such as Louise Emile Javal.
Clarity
The description of eye tracking technologies is very clear and easy to understand. However, it is not quite clear the ethical implications that come along with this technology. The Ethical Implications section could use more depth and more examples that show the concerns. One specific concern about privacy is mentioned. Maybe adding additional concerns about the technology would benefit the article. The Google Glass is a great example and could use some more elaboration plus additional examples.
Objective Reporting
The author does a great job at keeping a neutral point of view. I as the reader do not feel pulled one way or the other. As long as the rest of the article follows the current style, the writing will continue to be objective.
Overall the article is interesting and I am excited to see the end product.
