Talk:Caroline Rising

"I have 625 friends on Facebook and you are not one of them." What a great way to start off a post! A combination of the sharp attitude and the knowledge [I assume] that you did not enter this class with prior friends yields a witty beginning that makes that audience want to keep reading. Unfortunately, I felt the passion tapered off in the introduction; I think it could have been more interesting if you had kept that snarky attitude going.

I found the personal stories you shared to be quite gripping. So much that I wish you had shared more! (Obviously this is up to your discretion, especially if they are too private or personal). Many of the examples you used teased the reader with the emotions that you were feeling (break in: fear, grad speech: embarrassment, etc), so I think the embellishment of these experiences would aid you post. Overall, I believe you did address the seriousness of the posting assignment, and did a good job comparing your Facebook life to your "IRL."

Style, flow, and grammar were all fine. Great job!