Difference between revisions of "Talk:Teresa Yuan"
(Created page with "=== Clair Peng's Comment === Hi Teresa, I like your opening paragraph which states why you can find limited personal data online. I like the tone you made throughout the artic...") |
|||
| Line 1: | Line 1: | ||
=== Clair Peng's Comment === | === Clair Peng's Comment === | ||
Hi Teresa, I like your opening paragraph which states why you can find limited personal data online. I like the tone you made throughout the article which is fun to read. I like the point that even though there is limited information, you still analyzed your “searching results” on Facebook and Instagram. One thing to notice is I think you have a typo in your article, it should be “befriended” in the Facebook paragraph. Also, I like the “Implications” part in which you did reflections, and thought the pros and cons of having zero presence online. Overall I think it is a unique article because most people have a lot of exposure online and your article shows a different angle. I think it would be better if you can highlight each part of your article, add Head to it, which will make it clear and easier to read. | Hi Teresa, I like your opening paragraph which states why you can find limited personal data online. I like the tone you made throughout the article which is fun to read. I like the point that even though there is limited information, you still analyzed your “searching results” on Facebook and Instagram. One thing to notice is I think you have a typo in your article, it should be “befriended” in the Facebook paragraph. Also, I like the “Implications” part in which you did reflections, and thought the pros and cons of having zero presence online. Overall I think it is a unique article because most people have a lot of exposure online and your article shows a different angle. I think it would be better if you can highlight each part of your article, add Head to it, which will make it clear and easier to read. | ||
| + | ===Ruth Moon=== | ||
| + | Hello Teresa, you do a great job with connecting your statement to yourself and personal history. In addition to the two photos you need to include, I suggest you refer to the help page in order to format your post. It was difficult to follow without formatting. I think a table of contents would help organize all of the ideas you want to include in your statement. I think you could also improve by expanding upon your thoughts on the use of your personal information online. For example, you could talk about how you feel about your dad’s philosophy on data privacy growing up and what other measures you’ve personally done to protect your information online. Although you’ve provided analysis throughout your statement, I think it would help with formatting if you create a specific section to discuss the bulk of your analysis. | ||
Revision as of 21:09, 19 February 2020
Clair Peng's Comment
Hi Teresa, I like your opening paragraph which states why you can find limited personal data online. I like the tone you made throughout the article which is fun to read. I like the point that even though there is limited information, you still analyzed your “searching results” on Facebook and Instagram. One thing to notice is I think you have a typo in your article, it should be “befriended” in the Facebook paragraph. Also, I like the “Implications” part in which you did reflections, and thought the pros and cons of having zero presence online. Overall I think it is a unique article because most people have a lot of exposure online and your article shows a different angle. I think it would be better if you can highlight each part of your article, add Head to it, which will make it clear and easier to read.
Ruth Moon
Hello Teresa, you do a great job with connecting your statement to yourself and personal history. In addition to the two photos you need to include, I suggest you refer to the help page in order to format your post. It was difficult to follow without formatting. I think a table of contents would help organize all of the ideas you want to include in your statement. I think you could also improve by expanding upon your thoughts on the use of your personal information online. For example, you could talk about how you feel about your dad’s philosophy on data privacy growing up and what other measures you’ve personally done to protect your information online. Although you’ve provided analysis throughout your statement, I think it would help with formatting if you create a specific section to discuss the bulk of your analysis.
