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Hi Tommy, your data identity statement is well written and structured! It seems that your online persona is just an extension of your real identity. I think your statement would benefit from having more comparison between your online identity and actual identity. You can do this by personifying the identity created by your online profile, then reflecting on how accurate it embodies your real personality. I like that you included Floridi's quote that really strengthens your argument. In your Google section, you initially said that you were surprised by the search results, but afterwards you said that the results were as expected, which is a little confusing to readers. Also, you should incorporate some images to help illustrate the points that you are making. Overall, good job! | Hi Tommy, your data identity statement is well written and structured! It seems that your online persona is just an extension of your real identity. I think your statement would benefit from having more comparison between your online identity and actual identity. You can do this by personifying the identity created by your online profile, then reflecting on how accurate it embodies your real personality. I like that you included Floridi's quote that really strengthens your argument. In your Google section, you initially said that you were surprised by the search results, but afterwards you said that the results were as expected, which is a little confusing to readers. Also, you should incorporate some images to help illustrate the points that you are making. Overall, good job! | ||
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| + | I enjoyed reading your data identity statement. Your background information on why your profiles are public was something I have not seen many other students writing about. It was refreshing to hear your reasoning, instead of just simply reading that your profiles were public and that's it. I also enjoyed learning about your nonprofit organization back home. Way to go! | ||
| + | You present an interesting comparison between DuckDuckGo and Google. Perhaps expanding on this would be a good idea? It is intriguing to me that they both provide the same results. Perhaps they both draw from the same parent sources? | ||
| + | Additionally, I think commenting on why you think the data broker websites do not have your Ann Arbor location information would be a good idea. Finally, your quote from Floridi, "the right to privacy is also the right to a renewable identity," was perfect for your data identity statement. It fit right in! Great job on this. | ||
Revision as of 20:28, 20 February 2019
Wen Hoong Ling's Comment
Hi Tommy, your data identity statement is well written and structured! It seems that your online persona is just an extension of your real identity. I think your statement would benefit from having more comparison between your online identity and actual identity. You can do this by personifying the identity created by your online profile, then reflecting on how accurate it embodies your real personality. I like that you included Floridi's quote that really strengthens your argument. In your Google section, you initially said that you were surprised by the search results, but afterwards you said that the results were as expected, which is a little confusing to readers. Also, you should incorporate some images to help illustrate the points that you are making. Overall, good job!
Margaret Trudeau's Comment
Tommy, I enjoyed reading your data identity statement. Your background information on why your profiles are public was something I have not seen many other students writing about. It was refreshing to hear your reasoning, instead of just simply reading that your profiles were public and that's it. I also enjoyed learning about your nonprofit organization back home. Way to go! You present an interesting comparison between DuckDuckGo and Google. Perhaps expanding on this would be a good idea? It is intriguing to me that they both provide the same results. Perhaps they both draw from the same parent sources? Additionally, I think commenting on why you think the data broker websites do not have your Ann Arbor location information would be a good idea. Finally, your quote from Floridi, "the right to privacy is also the right to a renewable identity," was perfect for your data identity statement. It fit right in! Great job on this.
