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| − | Hey Andrew, this was a great post! The narrative tone that you took walking through the various aspects of your search made for this to be an extremely easy read. | + | Hey Andrew, this was a great post! The narrative tone that you took walking through the various aspects of your search made for this to be an extremely easy read. It's clear you had to take some extensive measures to find out about yourself online, and you really hit the aspect of "it's also about what you don't find" in your analysis. Especially as this is a first draft, I think you have really hit the personal tone and writing style portion, so if you are adding any additional info make sure to keep this same method of writing going. |
| − | To add some suggestions to your piece, I think it would benefit a lot from incorporating some ideas from the class readings and topics. Right now you have a great examination of your search for your digital identity, so adding academic ideas tying the consequences of your search would be the final piece tying everything together. Especially using these reading concepts as a centerpiece for your thesis, or discovering them as you conduct your identity search, would be two possible outlets for incorporating these academic pieces. | + | To add some suggestions to your piece, I think it would benefit a lot from incorporating some ideas from the class readings and topics. Right now you have a great examination of your search for your digital identity, so adding academic ideas tying the consequences of your search would be the final piece tying everything together. For example, Floridi makes some relatable points about volunteering data and our privacy in the digital world if you want to look into that as a starting point to get some inspiration of whose writing to add. Especially using these reading concepts as a centerpiece for your thesis, or discovering them as you conduct your identity search, would be two possible outlets for incorporating these academic pieces. |
Besides that it seems like there was an issue with the file upload, but these can be easily relieved (George's previous comment gives some good tips). I think this was a great read, good luck with your revision! | Besides that it seems like there was an issue with the file upload, but these can be easily relieved (George's previous comment gives some good tips). I think this was a great read, good luck with your revision! | ||
Latest revision as of 16:20, 20 February 2019
George Dixon
One of the strongest aspects of your paper was its ability to convey your personality. Both through a conversational tone as well as a sprinkling of colloquial phrases, I felt like I got a sense of who you are are a person, just a little. In addition, I also found myself genuinely interested in your report, most notable with regards to the russian knock-off of instagram. It's clear that you used google extensively to exhaust all possible online representations of your online identity, especially in relation to the role of this pay-wall, which you gave a clear boundary to within your data identity report.
Just a super small, aesthetic improvement I would make is to pictures. I also struggled with using MediaWiki's incredibly unintuitive UX, but I found that if you look on the left hand column of your page, you can click the link labeled "upload file". From here, just make sure the file name corresponds with the one you uploaded. I'd also potentially spend more time talking about the concept of what is an identity and how that relates to your online identity. There are some cool, more philosophical readings within this class' curriculum that could help you support the idea of a "true" identity and what that means to you.
Andrew Bunt
Hey Andrew, this was a great post! The narrative tone that you took walking through the various aspects of your search made for this to be an extremely easy read. It's clear you had to take some extensive measures to find out about yourself online, and you really hit the aspect of "it's also about what you don't find" in your analysis. Especially as this is a first draft, I think you have really hit the personal tone and writing style portion, so if you are adding any additional info make sure to keep this same method of writing going.
To add some suggestions to your piece, I think it would benefit a lot from incorporating some ideas from the class readings and topics. Right now you have a great examination of your search for your digital identity, so adding academic ideas tying the consequences of your search would be the final piece tying everything together. For example, Floridi makes some relatable points about volunteering data and our privacy in the digital world if you want to look into that as a starting point to get some inspiration of whose writing to add. Especially using these reading concepts as a centerpiece for your thesis, or discovering them as you conduct your identity search, would be two possible outlets for incorporating these academic pieces.
Besides that it seems like there was an issue with the file upload, but these can be easily relieved (George's previous comment gives some good tips). I think this was a great read, good luck with your revision!
