Difference between revisions of "Talk:Hannah Cooper"
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| − | Well, I follow you in Instagram, so I was definitely able to follow what you were saying, and knowing you in person of course made it all the easier. I think your visuals were very helpful. Overall, your post had a great sense of flow, and you used good examples to back your points and explain your identity well. You have outlined your personality well in a few of your photos, and even though the section about who you were "5 years ago" was short, it was described pretty well (not to mention how relatable it was). | + | Well, I follow you in Instagram, so I was definitely able to follow what you were saying, and knowing you in person of course made it all the easier. I think your visuals were very helpful. Overall, your post had a great sense of flow, and you used good examples to back your points and explain your identity well. You have outlined your personality well in a few of your photos, and even though the section about who you were "5 years ago" was short, it was described pretty well (not to mention how relatable it was). I think for revision purposes, you can expand a little bit more about how you value your privacy, and elaborate why you disagree with dystopian views of data mining. You can also possibly discuss why you feel people posting certain pictures of you feels more "violating of privacy" than data mining. That being said, overall, I really liked your piece! Good luck! -- Sharanya Jayendraprasad |
Revision as of 06:50, 21 February 2018
This piece was very visually appealing. The pictures you chose to include added great value to your posting as well as the layout you chose to display them in. I also really enjoyed the section titles you chose to use and how some of them were captions from your actual postings; I think that they helped display your personality/self-identity. One thing that I think you could alter during the revision process would be to make the sections a little more cohesive. There are strong ideas in all of your sections but they are a little fragmented so adding just a sentence in each section that kind of ties in the topic from previous section could make for an easier reading experience. Something else you could elaborate on is the section on data collection. While your self-identity is being expressed when you are scrolling on Instagram because of these ads, other people viewing your profile aren't necessarily seeing these ads so they may not be learning about your identity in this manner. Overall this was a very entertaining entry to read. -- Megan Lakkides
Well, I follow you in Instagram, so I was definitely able to follow what you were saying, and knowing you in person of course made it all the easier. I think your visuals were very helpful. Overall, your post had a great sense of flow, and you used good examples to back your points and explain your identity well. You have outlined your personality well in a few of your photos, and even though the section about who you were "5 years ago" was short, it was described pretty well (not to mention how relatable it was). I think for revision purposes, you can expand a little bit more about how you value your privacy, and elaborate why you disagree with dystopian views of data mining. You can also possibly discuss why you feel people posting certain pictures of you feels more "violating of privacy" than data mining. That being said, overall, I really liked your piece! Good luck! -- Sharanya Jayendraprasad
