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Revision as of 21:25, 17 February 2018
The captions on each of your images are really thought out and depict the images well. In your first Facebook section, you say you deleted your first account because of the “embarrassing, childish content.” Deleting this page is a big indication of how you want others to perceive you through your social media. Therefore, I feel that you could elaborate a little more on this point.
Additionally, there were a few typos in the Facebook section and grammatical errors throughout. One or two more proof reads will improve this. Here is a short list of some errors in this section.
- “tagged me [in]
- faker - grammatical error in sentence
- share it will [with]
Furthermore, when you say that your Twitter is "a work in progress," what are you trying to change about it and how/why is this what you want to be displayed? Further details in this section could also help depict your online identity more clearly.
Overall, I think you have a very unique approach to social media. One area I think you can really improve on is the way you explain how not utilizing your social media, the same way that many others do, is what makes your online social identity. As I was reading your post, I found it interesting that you defined your online social identity as what you post; whereas a main part of your identity is also the lack of posts. Your conclusion paragraph did wrap up this thought very well but it can be incorporated more throughout. I was fascinated and captured by your writing from start to finish! Nicely done.
-Erica Silverman
