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| + | I thought your lead as a narrative was very unique and drew me in as a reader right away. At first I was a little taken back by this page, as there were no sub-sections to differentiate the different aspects you talk about. I think the narrative that you shared is very important in today’s modern world as everything posted can be resurfaced at some point in your life. | ||
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| + | This page could be improved by breaking up the paragraphs into categories such as the personal narrative, implications of poor online decisions, news, etc. | ||
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| + | Your experience clearly taught you a life lesson of modifying your social media platforms in a way that you want others to see you. This theme is very important to learn in our generation as employers can easily search your name in a few seconds and see what you share on social media. | ||
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| + | I believe everything you touched on in this article is very important. The page could use some breakup between paragraphs to make it more appealing to the eye and easier to read. | ||
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| + | Overall, you had very good content in your article. Great job! | ||
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| + | -Madi Willihnganz | ||
Latest revision as of 02:46, 31 March 2017
Hey Ryan,
At first, I was rather overwhelmed with the layout of your autobiography. The large blocks of text were hard to differentiate, but when I dug into them I discovered they were filled with great content. I think you could have presented your story in a more reader-friendly way by splitting up the blocks of text into subcategories or adding more visual elements that would help guide your story. You touched on the theme of temporality, or the self-modification of your profile over time, after you experienced real implications from your Facebook identity. We live in an interesting time where our origins online begin at a much younger age than our parents generation, and as a result, there is a great deal of modification to protect our ever-shrinking privacy. I also liked how you touched on the saturated Facebook news articles and how quickly we are to accept what we read as truth. Overall, I thought you made excellent points that really spoke to how in depth you tackled this assignment (despite not even having a Facebook anymore). I just believe they could have been presented with more clarity to the reader, as it took patience to break down each paragraph. Great job!
- Shawn S.
Hi Ryan,
I thought your lead as a narrative was very unique and drew me in as a reader right away. At first I was a little taken back by this page, as there were no sub-sections to differentiate the different aspects you talk about. I think the narrative that you shared is very important in today’s modern world as everything posted can be resurfaced at some point in your life.
This page could be improved by breaking up the paragraphs into categories such as the personal narrative, implications of poor online decisions, news, etc.
Your experience clearly taught you a life lesson of modifying your social media platforms in a way that you want others to see you. This theme is very important to learn in our generation as employers can easily search your name in a few seconds and see what you share on social media.
I believe everything you touched on in this article is very important. The page could use some breakup between paragraphs to make it more appealing to the eye and easier to read.
Overall, you had very good content in your article. Great job!
-Madi Willihnganz
