Difference between revisions of "Talk:Vishruta Kulkarni"

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Peer Review 1:

Vishruta,

Good job with this assignment! I felt you were really genuine in describing your identity and use of Facebook. You can tell you put time into thinking through how you use many of the features and your reactions to Facebook in general. Your writing style also gave you a clear voice and was consistent throughout the paper.

Positives:

I really like the theme you used to shape your essay, Maslow's triangle was a really creative and innovative way to connect the different features built on the site. Also this gave your description and narratives to the different features logical flow and categorization.

Also great job with the wikipedia structure. You did a great job with the summary box to the right, I liked how you included this to give a brief overview of yourself, this is what I read first and so it was a nice lead in.

You properly linked all the relative cities and terms, which made it nice for me as the reader to refer to and learn more. Also all of your headers and divisions made the piece clear and appear nicely broken up.

Suggestions:

There are a few minor spelling/grammar errors, but nothing that detracted from the meaning of the piece. I think it would be neat to include a snapshot of your Facebook Map in this section to add a visual to your writing. Is the snapshot included in the Privacy section what friends see, or anyone can see? You could specify this rather than saying 'others' view.