Difference between revisions of "Talk:Joanna Warrick"

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Comment #1: Hi Joanna,

I really enjoyed reading your avatar autobiography. Your arguments were clear and thoughtful. You also chose an interesting approach to the assignment by including an introduction and a conclusion. It organized your thoughts very well. I especially liked how personal you made it. The part about your cousin was a great example and supported your arguments.

From first glance I noticed your lack of images. I understand you are not an avid Facebook user but I think it would be beneficial to include a picture of your Facebook profile and potentially your profile picture. I think it will give readers a deeper understanding and a better visual. If for whatever reason you may not feel comfortable posting these pictures perhaps explain why and find another graphic to use just to make a little more visually pleasing.

It might be interesting to explore why you have chosen not to deactivate your Facebook account after all these years. You clearly see plenty of problems with Facebook and acknowledge the artificial relationships it creates. So why have you chosen to stay? What is keeping you? Are there societal pressures to have a Facebook account even if you don't agree with the principles and barely use it? I think this could supplement your ideas very nicely.

Great job!

- Avery

Comment #2:

Hey there,

First off, I know exactly what you mean by being an over-analyzer - I have the exact same problem myself, so I get where you're coming from. I liked how you talked about the impact that your friends and family have had on your Facebook persona, sometimes it requires a personal connection to draw us into something, or even just introduce us to a new way of thinking - even if it's something simple like music. Things like that really allowed me to get a better insight as to who you are and what you're like.

With regards to bystander accountability, I think you do a great job of doing an overview of the pros and cons of using Facebook, and the types of situations people are likely to encounter. While you give a good personal perspective, I was hoping that you would have tied in some of readings that we've done into this section. Some of the questions raised in the Watson and Smith reading would have been great to tackle in this section.

Similarly, while you do a great job of explaining how you view digital vs physical relationships, there are portions of the readings that I think would help you drive your point home as it applies more generally. The Watson and Smith article would also be useful in this endeavor.

Overall, I think you did a solid job on this, and with a little polish in the revision, your piece could be all the better.