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The captions on each of your images are really thought out and depict the images well. In your first ''Facebook'' section, you say you deleted your first account because of the “embarrassing, childish content.” Deleting this page is a big indication of how you want others to perceive you through your social media. Therefore, I feel that you could elaborate a little more on this point.  
 
The captions on each of your images are really thought out and depict the images well. In your first ''Facebook'' section, you say you deleted your first account because of the “embarrassing, childish content.” Deleting this page is a big indication of how you want others to perceive you through your social media. Therefore, I feel that you could elaborate a little more on this point.  
 
 
Additionally, there were a few typos in the ''Facebook'' section and grammatical errors throughout. One or two more proof reads will improve this. Here is a short list of some errors in this section.
 
Additionally, there were a few typos in the ''Facebook'' section and grammatical errors throughout. One or two more proof reads will improve this. Here is a short list of some errors in this section.
 
* “tagged me [in]
 
* “tagged me [in]
 
* faker - grammatical error in sentence
 
* faker - grammatical error in sentence
 
* share it will [with]
 
* share it will [with]
 
 
Furthermore, when you say that your Twitter is "a work in progress," what are you trying to change about it and how/why is this what you want to be displayed? Further details in this section could also help depict your online identity more clearly.
 
Furthermore, when you say that your Twitter is "a work in progress," what are you trying to change about it and how/why is this what you want to be displayed? Further details in this section could also help depict your online identity more clearly.
 
 
Overall, I think you have a very unique approach to social media. One area I think you can really improve on is the way you explain how not utilizing your social media, the same way that many others do, is what makes your online social identity. As I was reading your post, I found it interesting that you defined your online social identity as what you post; whereas a main part of your identity is also the lack of posts. Your conclusion paragraph did wrap up this thought very well but it can be incorporated more throughout. I was fascinated and captured by your writing from start to finish! Nicely done.
 
Overall, I think you have a very unique approach to social media. One area I think you can really improve on is the way you explain how not utilizing your social media, the same way that many others do, is what makes your online social identity. As I was reading your post, I found it interesting that you defined your online social identity as what you post; whereas a main part of your identity is also the lack of posts. Your conclusion paragraph did wrap up this thought very well but it can be incorporated more throughout. I was fascinated and captured by your writing from start to finish! Nicely done.
 
 
-Erica Silverman
 
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I enjoyed reading your autobiography. In the first paragraph, you state "It feels strongly like a social performance that I am just not interested in participating in. I would rather hang out with friends in person or use text messaging to communicate who I am." I would love to know a little bit more about why this is, as it is a unique perspective that you take and you could have space to elaborate on it. I really like the distinction you make about Facebook being "authentic, but not complete." Beautiful writing! Again, at the end, you say "I feel this is the most authentic way of me expressing my identity online because nothing else feels as right. My goal is to continue to share myself through these avenues in the future." I am interested to know more about this though. Why does nothing else feel right to you? What about it feels fake? What are your concerns regarding fake/social performance? Overall, I think you've done a great first draft.  
 
I enjoyed reading your autobiography. In the first paragraph, you state "It feels strongly like a social performance that I am just not interested in participating in. I would rather hang out with friends in person or use text messaging to communicate who I am." I would love to know a little bit more about why this is, as it is a unique perspective that you take and you could have space to elaborate on it. I really like the distinction you make about Facebook being "authentic, but not complete." Beautiful writing! Again, at the end, you say "I feel this is the most authentic way of me expressing my identity online because nothing else feels as right. My goal is to continue to share myself through these avenues in the future." I am interested to know more about this though. Why does nothing else feel right to you? What about it feels fake? What are your concerns regarding fake/social performance? Overall, I think you've done a great first draft.  
 
-Madeline Nowicki
 
-Madeline Nowicki
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Great job, Rebecca!
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Next, address your online identity through the lens of our readings.
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When revising, consider your colleagues’ comments above: they are spot on.
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Please consider them fully for your revision.
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If you have any questions, or need help, please let me know.
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Best,
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Corina

Latest revision as of 04:11, 5 March 2018

The captions on each of your images are really thought out and depict the images well. In your first Facebook section, you say you deleted your first account because of the “embarrassing, childish content.” Deleting this page is a big indication of how you want others to perceive you through your social media. Therefore, I feel that you could elaborate a little more on this point. Additionally, there were a few typos in the Facebook section and grammatical errors throughout. One or two more proof reads will improve this. Here is a short list of some errors in this section.

  • “tagged me [in]
  • faker - grammatical error in sentence
  • share it will [with]

Furthermore, when you say that your Twitter is "a work in progress," what are you trying to change about it and how/why is this what you want to be displayed? Further details in this section could also help depict your online identity more clearly. Overall, I think you have a very unique approach to social media. One area I think you can really improve on is the way you explain how not utilizing your social media, the same way that many others do, is what makes your online social identity. As I was reading your post, I found it interesting that you defined your online social identity as what you post; whereas a main part of your identity is also the lack of posts. Your conclusion paragraph did wrap up this thought very well but it can be incorporated more throughout. I was fascinated and captured by your writing from start to finish! Nicely done. -Erica Silverman

Hi Rebecca, I enjoyed reading your autobiography. In the first paragraph, you state "It feels strongly like a social performance that I am just not interested in participating in. I would rather hang out with friends in person or use text messaging to communicate who I am." I would love to know a little bit more about why this is, as it is a unique perspective that you take and you could have space to elaborate on it. I really like the distinction you make about Facebook being "authentic, but not complete." Beautiful writing! Again, at the end, you say "I feel this is the most authentic way of me expressing my identity online because nothing else feels as right. My goal is to continue to share myself through these avenues in the future." I am interested to know more about this though. Why does nothing else feel right to you? What about it feels fake? What are your concerns regarding fake/social performance? Overall, I think you've done a great first draft. -Madeline Nowicki

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Great job, Rebecca!


Next, address your online identity through the lens of our readings.

When revising, consider your colleagues’ comments above: they are spot on.

Please consider them fully for your revision.

If you have any questions, or need help, please let me know.

Best,

Corina