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| − | I really enjoyed reading your avatar as I find that it encompasses a lot of the things you are passionate about at the University of Michigan. You did a very good job of explaining what your profile looks like to the average person viewing it and what your “personal brand” that you display to the online world is | + | I really enjoyed reading your avatar as I find that it encompasses a lot of the things you are passionate about at the University of Michigan. You did a very good job of explaining what your profile looks like to the average person viewing it and what your “personal brand” that you display to the online world is. |
One thing that you could potentially improve on is the chronological structure of how this piece is organized. You talk about your sorority in two different places in your avatar with similar content. Combining and condensing the paragraphs could potentially improve this piece. | One thing that you could potentially improve on is the chronological structure of how this piece is organized. You talk about your sorority in two different places in your avatar with similar content. Combining and condensing the paragraphs could potentially improve this piece. | ||
Revision as of 02:19, 31 March 2017
Hi Mackenzie,
I really enjoyed reading your avatar as I find that it encompasses a lot of the things you are passionate about at the University of Michigan. You did a very good job of explaining what your profile looks like to the average person viewing it and what your “personal brand” that you display to the online world is.
One thing that you could potentially improve on is the chronological structure of how this piece is organized. You talk about your sorority in two different places in your avatar with similar content. Combining and condensing the paragraphs could potentially improve this piece.
In addition to what your profile says about you such as being involved in a sorority and EnCore, I believe you did a good job bringing in the things that are unrepresented on your social media such as procrastination.
I like how you mentioned your personal brand revolves around five core values. These core values were stated but the page could be improved by explaining how each one of them is demonstrated with an example. Additional photos or statuses could help improve this piece.
Overall, very good job explaining your online self, as it was very easy to picture what encapsulates you as an individual.
-Madi Willihnganz
