Talk:Professional League of Legends

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In general, the article has done a great job on meeting each of the requirements.

Length

There are 2960 words including the references and the contents, 2945 words by eliminating the references list, and 2863 words by eliminating the references list and the the contents.

The length of the article is great. As the requirement of the length of the article is "about 3000 words long," while "it is ok if the article is about 100 words shorter or longer," I would recommend adding about 40 more words to meet the requirement under any standard.

Structure

An opening paragraph that summarizes the issue

The opening paragraph briefly summarizes what "Professional League of Legends" is. The paragraph also declares the main points of the article, including the Popularity, the Regional Leagures, information about teams and international competitions, and the issue about playing League of Legends professionally as a full-time job.

It would also be helpful if the keyword "ethical issues" could be included inside the opening paragraph, so that the reader can rapidly realize what are the ethical issues that this article is going to talk about.

The body of the article in one or more sections

The body of the article has been clearly divided into seven main sections, one additional section about the related topics, and one additional section for references. The information a reader can get throughout reading the article is clear once upon reading the contents.

Both the section for "Notable Teams" and the section for "International Competitions" have subtitles that dividing the sections into subsections, so that each part of the article here is in a good length that the reader can keep track of what is talking about. I would also recommend dividing the sections for "History", "Popularity", and "Broadcasting" into subsections. Though not necessary (since those sections are compact), this could help the reader to recognize the structure of the article better.

Statements are backed up by references to reliable sources

There are 25 references included inside this article. Sentences that cite these references as supporting material appear in most sections throughout the article. Statements are followed by necessary citation marks that are corresponding with related websites.

For the section about "Regional Leagues" and the section about "Life after Professional League of Legends," some references can be used to make the statements be more convicing.

Clarity

The ethical issues are stated clearly inside the section for "Life after Professional League of Legends."

It is observable that the article focuses on the issues about young players with great talent having finite careers. Most of the players in Professional League of Legends start their careers at a very young age, so that the "new rules requiring players to be at least 18 years old" have been established. Besides, most of them have no chance to keep their career long.

The ethical issue is important since the short-liveness of the career in Professional League of Legends gives the chances of being successful to only a few of the players, while most of others have to turn toward other career path for their life after Professional League of Legends. This would also be a key "to expanding the size of the professional League of Legends industry."

Objective reporting (Neutral point of view)

The article reports on ethical issues / controversies objectively. The author summarized the information about the ethical issue, and then listed the objective information from many aspects. The author also have mentioned the points from both the players and the professional League of Legends industry. The tone of this article is very objective and descriptive.

More references can be added for the section about ethical issue, so that who is holding a statement can be clearer. Besides, "if there are multiple stakeholders involved," more views from other stakeholders can be added so that the issue can be reported in more perspectives.