Talk:Morgan Cary

Alyssa Roach's Commentary

Hi Morgan!

I really enjoyed reading your data integrity statement and loved how you started it. The intro was humorous and I loved how you incorporated the awkward pre teen stage of internet exploration that most people our age seem to have gone through. It wrapped me in and already showcased your personality. The second half of your intro was an excellent thesis statement that allowed me to see what was coming in your statement and encourage me to keep reading. First thing I noticed that you might want to consider changing is the first title "Morgan Cary", for me introduction or meet me or something along those lines would make it a lot easier to understand your organization and dive into your statement. I liked how you broke up your findings with rounds of analysis. I did have some confusion on the round two of your analysis, you mentioned adding different terms next to your name in the hopes of getting more relevant results. One of these terms was "Lucd" I don't know what this is so it was a little confusing to me. Maybe consider mentioning what this is or removing it as it may confuse other readers like me. I would also love a bit more analysis on the DuckDuckGo section. White pages websites honestly really freak me out and I would love to hear your opinions on how you feel about this information being so readily available. Lastly I thought your images were very effective and allowed me to get a sense of what you were seeing when writing and researching for this article. Over all a great start and I can't wait to read the final product!

Comment from Adaku Anaele

Hi Morgan,

I really enjoyed reading your data identity statement! Your prose was great and added some umph to your article. I enjoyed the set up of your titles like the Round 1, Round 2, Bonus Round. That was engaging. Everything seems to flow well logically because you stated talking about your findings on Google then refocusing the search to see if you can find more information about yourself. It was a bit funny that you were like "finally finding something about myself" as in you want your information readily available for the world but I don't think that is the case.

A suggestion I got that you can choose to adapt or not is adding in links on your page to make it similar to a wikipedia page (and interactive) for your audience. Also any website that you referenced that you feel comfortable sharing can go in a reference section. Overall I think you did a really great job and really defined what your data identity said about yourself. Great work!