Talk:Kirk Turrentine

Mutaman Alnaseri's Comment

Hello there Kirk,

I think that what you've spoken about rings true for many. Companies nowadays crown machine learning as king and don't mind extrapolating data to make a bigger profile of you. You're analysis of how Google misrepresents your identity was well written and shows a lot. In particular, tying in how your activities on social media and your personal websites can affect the interpretation of your online identity really highlights how the internet can overexpose one aspect of you while ignoring other important parts of your life.

Thesis aside, I wanted to point out a few things about your style of writing. For the most part, I thought it was pretty good. However, I noticed a few typos here and there alongside some grammatical mistakes. These issues were infrequent but I'd suggest having someone look your writing over to point out the mistakes. Additionally, I felt that "The Accuracy" and "The Question of Ownership" don't fit together very well. The first one talks about how companies should accurately represent data identities while the second one talks about how people should be able to keep data to themselves. Although the main ideas of these two sections work well together, the way you wrote them doesn't mesh as well as it could. I would recommend revising "The Question of Ownership" to talk about the tradeoffs of having control of your own data vs being misrepresented online.

Comment: Calvin Kerns

Hi Kirk. Nice job on your page! I appreciate your choice of strong vocabulary and think that you have many powerful sentences that are well-formed.

Your section about data autonomy was definitely an interesting read, but as a critique, I think you stray from the purpose of this assignment in that area. I think what you wrote what make for a great blog post, but it doesn’t exactly pertain to the topic at hand, which is your data identity. I could be wrong in my assessment or my understanding of the assignment could fall short of what it should be, but I think your overall page would be more cohesive if it focused more on you. Perhaps this could entail just taking what you wrote about data autonomy and connecting it more closely with the argument about your data identity, or perhaps it could entail substituting this section for more information about your public data trail. I personally think your wiki page could benefit if you dived more deeply into what each of the sites you found from a Google search of your name reveal about you and addressed whether these are representative of your true identity or not.