Talk:Flo

Length: - The article is not 3000+- 100 words. However, the editor has included the titles for what they are going to talk about and they have the background with some references on the. I would recommend elaborate more and adding more information for the final draft for full completion. And also to make sure to connect the topic to information technology and the ethics behind it. I think this is a really good topic. This is only a draft so I would expect that the author would include more information regarding the topic.

Structure: -The article does include an opening paragraph, but it lack background information and body of the article. Although, it does have the section titles, the sections are missing. The article has a history section which is a nice add on. However, it does lack a majority of the major components. The editor needs to add more explanation to how this product/app is considered an information technology component and how it could ethically affect individuals and I think a good idea would also to talk about the perspective of this app in different cultures and how that is affected by its use and the information put in it. One more thing that could be talked about is that the flo app does ask questions to get more accurate measurements so how real are the answers to these questions would be a thing to look into. There is still more to include in this for the complete draft. The author does include important sections such as the intro, history, features, positive outcomes, and ethical concerns. I think they have a good layout so far, they could think about including more sections to make it more clear to the audience what they are talking about. I also wanted to add that the editor has a good beginning with the history section they are going in the right direction. I would only recommend to add more information and have it also be more clear for the audience. I also would say to speak regarding past issues if there was any problem or case with the flo app being unethical and look into if someone has actually had an experience with it and made it into a case.

Clarity: -this is only a draft, and there is not much written by the editor, but from what is there I think the issue at stake is clear with the section titles used. I think I know where the author is going to take this topic and to what extent. Therefore, I think that the final draft will be very well written when all the information is summed up. So far I understand where this is going to go, however, for the completion draft they should try to add more information to display their perspective and the point they are trying to bring up more. I think to make this more clear is also to add extra research regarding the matter and speak about it has been involved in information technology and where it could go wrong or have gone wrong. overall I think this is a good head start with the article.

Objective recording: -I do not think there is an objective recording, the author is only trying to show how this app could have ethical issues that fall from it, which is true. They are doing research with reference to find the ethical issues behind it and how it could be harmful. The author is trying to show the research that is done on the app with no specific bias. Although this topic could bring up more subjective opinion I think that there is a lot of research done on how the flo app could be ethical or not which could help with the article to be more research base than opinion biased.