Talk:Elena Tzalel
Hannah Weirens: Although this is a draft, Elena did a very surface-level analysis of her data identity. She briefly described the search results she found when she searched for herself. She can work to develop this before the final version of the data identity assignment is due, as well as add at least two photos, since she did not add any yet and that was required for the assignment. Elena wrote in a very conversational style, which made it very easy to follow. And although it flowed nicely and didn’t have any noticeable grammatical errors, she does have to add a decent amount more to reach the recommended length for this assignment so that would be something to be more concerned about later. I also think Elena could add sections to her profile (instead of having it as one large body of text). Overall, I think Elena is off to a good start for her draft and just needs to continue developing it!
James Benjey: Building on Emma’s comments, your conversational style made your statement very easy to read. I think you’ve got a great start and could easily build a structure from your current iteration. Your statement is clear to me, “I don't think that a person's internet persona can even begin to graze who they actually are as a person”. I want to know more about this when reading further, I appreciate reading about the persona you found online and I’d like to hear how it compares to who you see yourself as. Is it our behavior? Are we judged by one action or all actions? Reading your work made me think of many questions which I feel means you have a great foundation!
Shi Ya Wong I think this a good start to the data identity statement. I liked how you searched for yourself online and analyzed the results and compared it to your expectations. I think you could dig deeper with your search with clarifying terms like adding your hometown or school to the search of your name. Additionally I think you could search yourself on a background checker such as checkmate.com. I also enjoyed the conversational style of your writing and I feel it fits well with the assignment. I think you could add more analysis on the results of your searches and whether or not it depicts an accurate picture of your identity.
