Talk:Chihiro Jimbo

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(incredibly well done, a phenomenal job of a biography)
From the synchronism of your facebook page with your writing style and self reflection emerges a clear image of who you are. This stands in stark contrast to the bare presentation of self that is projected on facebook. An yet it is a bold statement that less is often more. Though arriving at this understanding is only possible through your self disclosure in this your avatar biography. That is: while the reasons for withholding information about oneself vary greatly and even as assumptions can be drawn from this, the depth of your avatar's personality cannot be fully experienced without the details you have chosen to expose for this assignment. But as this disclosure is purposeful and willing, i am left feeling as if standing at a true precipice, not knowing what you have left behind, hidden. You have chosen to reveal your motherhood but at the same time i wonder whether you also meant to disclose your own biases. While i am not privy to your past and cannot know what prejudices you have endured, i question whether your statement that: "there are still stigmas and stereotypes about marrying and having children at a young age" reflects more on how you view yourself or perceive to be viewed than how others truly view you? (i.e. it is true that there are stereotypes surrounding young marriages and motherhood, but marriage and children are a challenge at any age.) i am left curious about your experience with this assignment. It seems you felt that in order to complete the assignment you had to reveal more about yourself than you would do normally. i would like to have heard more about how you managed this and how you decided what to present here now in this assignment and how it affected you, but then again as your name suggests be aware: deep waters beware. mstuart (talk) 00:07, 17 November 2012 (EST)

Chihiro, you did such a great job presenting who you are as a person. I can definitely see how it clashes entirely with your Facebook page. The autobiography had a good flow; it felt more like a story than an essay. Organization was good and your style/grammar was impeccable. I appreciated the honesty you strove for about your son and your personal life. Like the first evaluator, I was wondering what your statement on early marriage and having kids at a young age meant? Did it affect the choices you made with your Facebook layout? There is really nothing to “fix” for your page in terms of content and style, but an improvement could be to assess more of your secondary sources- other people’s posts or photos tagged by others. These analyses could boost the points you made from your primary sources. I am interested in the meaning behind your favorite quote. How does it relate to your identity (you were not very specific) and why did you choose to put it on Facebook? Regarding to your limited amount of friends, have you ever thought of updating the list? Was there a reason for keeping all of theme throughout the years, even though you only remain in contact with 5 of your closest friends?

Overall, I see the genuineness of your intent and the mature assessment of your identity. Great job on a well written first draft.-Melissa

P.S. I was really interested when I came across your name on your roster because it reminded me of one of my favorite movies Spirited Away. I'm sure you received many references to that though.