Talk:Bailee Stirn

Bailee

It is extremely interesting how you tackled your abundance of online information specifically the fact that you are from a small town with a very unique name made queries about you specific and on point. As a result, you focused a lot on the abundance of information that you found online with pictures that seems genuine. In addition, the fact that you closely alludes to class material make your reflection especially authentic. With that said, I also like the fact that you have two different sections under pattern one for what they got right and one for what they got wrong. However, you never elaborated on what specific pattern is there within what they got wrong and what they got right, you explained how they got somethings wrong and somethings right, but there really isn’t any explanation on why so I would recommend either changing the title or elaborate more on what specific pattern you saw. Finally, your writing style is clear and concise with a strong flair of your own personality so there’s nothing much to change for that.

Margot Siegel's Review of Bailee Stirn's MediaWiki Article:

I really enjoyed reading your wiki, and you grabbed my attention from the beginning because you began by talking about how you felt throughout this process. One of the most interesting aspects that you brought to my mind was the fact that although the information about you online was correct, you were not given the opportunity to present it in the way you wanted to. I had never thought about it this way, but it did spark some ideas in my mind about having the ability to portray ones “ideal self” online. In addition, the way you separated the Google search into four categories made it easier, as a reader, to follow how the information about you was presented online. Also, splitting the patterns section up in the “right” and “wrong” made it clear to understand how each of these aspects online made you feel, specifically about the breaching of privacy that is occurring online through everyone’s online footprint. I would have liked to read more about your data broker experience and bringing that into the conclusion a little more as well. I did not get a sense for exactly how the data broker information made you feel about your information not being private. Overall, I found your wiki to be extremely interesting and forced me to think about aspects of privacy that hadn’t crossed my mind before and the wiki flowed well which made me enjoy reading it even more.