Talk:Ali Baker

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Hey Ali!

This is a really great post and it was really interesting to learn more about your Jordan Street Art project. Also, your analysis of LinkedIn was very insightful. It sort of forces many people to put their information out there in the hopes of landing a job.

In terms of what you could improve, the points you made with the Jordan Street Art project are really solid. The government aspect is not something I had thought about and is an interesting point in ethics. However, it would be nice if you could introduce this is some way in your introduction.

- Nina Janies

Comment by Rani Woerner

Overall, I thought this piece was very interesting. There were many intriguing points made and ideas discussed, from the commonness of your name to your thoughts on privacy in regards to your online data. I feel like I learned a lot about you, your journey researching yourself, and your thoughts/reflections on the process. I especially enjoyed how you discuss how public you are with your information and how that aspect of your personal identity is what has allowed your online identity to be more extensive and representative of who you are. Very well done! One thing you might consider that could help you delve deeper in your comparison of your online data identity and your personal identity is writing a few sentences at the end of each section where you Googled yourself to discuss specifics on the accuracy of the information. For example, when you found yourself on LinkedIn, one thing you could discuss is how reflective your LinkedIn information is of the real “you,” seeing as LinkedIn is a more professional platform and may not reflect the more casual side of your identity. You do a good job of comparing your online identity to your personal identity in summary, but I think getting a little more specific could make that assessment that much deeper.

In terms of organization, I liked how you structured your piece; it definitely had a logical flow to it. I appreciated how you started with your more generic name, then your given name, and finally your nickname. The increasing specificity of each search made for a cool and unique structure. The one thing that seemed a bit out of place to me was your projects section. Later on, with your discussion of project ethics, I understood why it was so important that projects needed to be its own section, but at first glance, it seemed a little out of place. You might possibly combine the projects section with the project ethics section just to make the organization flow a bit better and make a bit more sense to your reader. I liked how casual your writing style was. I think it fit the assignment well and made the read a lot more entertaining. Your grammar was also pretty good. You might want to read back through everything and tweak some minor grammar issues here and there to make the piece flow a bit better, but overall great job!